Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graph illustrates the total average monthly change in prices of copper,nickel,and zinc in 2014
in 2014 copper reach approximately 2% of monthly change.while nickel prices changed in previous monthly like 6% and the zinc prices increased about 1%.so that chart express that how much the prices increased last months in which nicle was on top its prices have been changed on high level and the copper and zinc changed 1 and 2% which is averagethe chart shows the .average monthly increases in the previous months in which the prices of these three metals increased due to increase the rate of market.so the chart shows the prices ranges of three metlas and nickel is on top which has high increased prices of 6% in previous month .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, coming in at only 127 words, which negatively impacts task achievement. While the student attempts to describe parts of the graph—such as mentioning nickel reaching 6% and copper starting around 2%—the overview is extremely weak and fails to present a clear summary of the overall trends. Many descriptions are confused or inaccurate, such as stating that 'nickel was on top its prices have been changed on high level.' Important trends across the full twelve-month period for all three metals are largely omitted, leading to under-developed ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text lacks proper paragraphing, appearing as a single, dense block of text. There is an absence of clear logical progression and cohesive devices, with sentences strung together abruptly using lowercase letters and missing punctuation (e.g., '.so that chart express that...'). Referencing is frequently unclear, and the overall arrangement makes the response difficult to follow. There is no clear structure introducing the data, body paragraphs comparing the trends, and a concluding overview.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The lexical range is very basic and repetitive. The student relies heavily on simple words like 'prices', 'changed', 'increased', and 'top'. There are noticeable errors in word choice and phrasing, such as 'total average monthly change', 'changed in previous monthly', and 'high increased prices'. These limitations and lexical inaccuracies restrict the precision required for an Academic Task 1 response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the text. There is an absence of correct sentence boundaries, leading to run-on sentences and sentence fragments (e.g., 'in 2014 copper reach approximately 2% of monthly change.while nickel prices changed...'). Punctuation and capitalization are largely neglected. While there is a minor attempt at complex structures, they are poorly formed and frequently inaccurate, causing considerable difficulty for the reader.
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