Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The line bar graph represent the prices changes in distinguish three metal element during the year of 2014.
Overall, it shows Niakal has a massive changes in prices over the month. Meanwhile,Zinc has slightly changes during the month and copper was remained steady during the entire month.
Nickel prices had srted with minus 3 but over the whole month it was fluctuated with end of highest 6 metal price with the comparison of other two metal in which Zinc had started with minus 1 steady and after that it goes upward from 1 to 2 then in last 3. Meanwhile, Copper prices has steady with slightly differnce from 2% to -1.5 to 1 then again come on 2 %.
Nickel has ha major price increase in their prices in the entire month of 2014. other hand Zinc also shows changes in prices with the great end and Copper became steady whole out the month with little change.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The student attempts to address the task by summarizing the information shown in the line graph regarding copper, nickel, and zinc prices in 2014. However, the data reported contains significant inaccuracies and misinterpretations of the chart. For instance, the student states that nickel started with 'minus 3' and copper 'remained steady' or 'was steady with slightly difference from 2% to -1.5 to 1', which fails to accurately reflect the actual monthly percentage changes depicted. The overview attempts to capture general trends but is vague and confusing ('Niakal has a massive changes'). While all three metals are mentioned, the lack of accurate data reporting and confusing body paragraph details restrict the task response to a Band 4.0 level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response is divided into multiple short paragraphs, attempting a structure with an introduction, overview, and body details. However, logical progression is severely disrupted by confusing sequencing and repetitive ideas. Cohesive devices are either misused or absent, and referencing is unclear ('in which Zinc had started...', 'Meanwhile, Copper prices has steady...'). Furthermore, the final paragraph largely reiterates points made in the previous paragraphs without adding new progression or clarity. Paragraphing is attempted, but the overall organization fails to create a smooth, coherent flow of information, aligning with Band 4.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. Words like 'changes', 'prices', 'steady', and 'metal' are repeated excessively throughout the short text. There are numerous spelling errors and misspellings of key terms, such as 'represent' (should be 'represents'), 'distinguish' (should be 'distinguished'), 'Niakal' (Nickel), 'srted' (started), and 'differnce' (difference). The range of vocabulary is extremely limited and inadequate for discussing statistical data effectively, restricting the score to a Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The student demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences contain serious errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and basic sentence construction. Examples include 'The line bar graph represent', 'copper was remained steady', 'Nickel prices had srted with minus 3', and 'after that it goes upward'. Punctuation and phrasing are often awkward, causing strain for the reader and distorting the intended meaning of several statements. Due to the high frequency of basic grammatical errors and lack of complex structures with good control, this response warrants a Band 4.0.
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