Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given graph illustrates monthly alter in the range of three metal in between 201. categories are copper, nickel and zinc.
overall, the drastic change is seen in nickel with a magnificent drop of 9 points . moreover in copper and zinc has equal fluctuation .
Nickel was started at 6 holding the highest percentage then there were drastic fall of it and it touchs its lowest in j with the approximately percentage of -3 the a rising fluctation seen in contrast copper and copper and zinc are having competiton because they are having fluctuation such on will go up then another cross it they both started at around same level and also ended at same level furthermore they also finished approximately at same level.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, coming in at only 125 words, which impacts the overall task achievement and completeness of the report. While the student attempts to provide an overview and mentions some key trends, such as the high starting point of nickel and its subsequent drop, the information is disjointed and lacks a fully developed summary. Several data points are inaccurate or poorly communicated, such as stating a drop of '9 points' for nickel or vague descriptions like 'in copper and zinc has equal fluctuation'. Furthermore, the response misses several key comparisons between the three metals across the year. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organization of the response is extremely weak. The text is divided into three very brief paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is difficult to follow. The student uses basic cohesive devices like 'overall', 'moreover', and 'furthermore', but these are often misused or placed awkwardly. Referencing is frequently unclear, particularly in the third paragraph where sentences run together without proper punctuation or logical transitions (e.g., 'then the a rising fluctation seen in contrast copper and copper and zinc are having competiton'). Paragraphing is insufficient to structure the response logically.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The lexical range is very limited and inadequate for an Academic Task 1 response. The student repeatedly uses basic vocabulary and experiences severe word-choice errors, such as 'monthly alter' instead of 'monthly change', 'metal' instead of 'metals', and 'competiton' instead of 'competition'. There are also frequent spelling errors, such as 'touchs', 'fluctation', and 'approximately'. Uncommon lexical items are absent, and the vocabulary used fails to describe visual data with precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is severely restricted. The response consists of a mix of poorly constructed simple sentences and faulty complex structures. There are numerous basic grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'categories are copper', 'copper and zinc has equal fluctuation'), missing articles, and incorrect prepositions. Punctuation is largely neglected, with run-on sentences that lack appropriate periods or commas. These frequent errors cause significant difficulty for the reader.
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