Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrates the medium monthly alteration in the prices of copper,nickel,zinc three metals during 2014.
Overall,nickel element seen decline trend in the given period whereas,zinc had noticed increased trend over the year and copper is flucated through the months.
An analysis of the image revals that Nickel had started with 6% in the January month and experienced dramatic fall by the june month upto -3% and increased in following months upto 1% by the final month of the year.Zinc commence at 1% in the January month and and rose to 3% by the February and fell back to -1% in the middle of the year in june and aslo in October and slows climbs to 2% at the end of the year.
In compares with Copper it is only 2% price in the January month flucates till the june around upto -1% and maintained the same percentage for three months july to September at 1% and end of the period it is marked at arounds1.5% prices
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features and making comparisons among the three metals throughout 2014. An overview is provided, noting the differing overall trends for nickel, zinc, and copper. However, some aspects of the response are under-developed or less fully explained. For example, while the starting points and major shifts are mentioned, some specific figures and months are slightly imprecise or lack full elaboration. The selection of data is generally relevant and accurate according to the provided graph, satisfying the requirements for this level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The text demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement with a logical progression from an introduction to an overview and body paragraphs detailing specific data points. Paragraphing is used to separate the introduction, overview, and individual metal analyses. However, cohesion is at times mechanical or faulty. The use of referencing and cohesive devices could be smoother; phrases like 'In compares with' and repetitive connectors create some disjointedness. The overarching structure is clear enough to guide the reader through the data, but referencing relationships between sentences require better integration to reach a higher level.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common items related to data trends such as 'dramatic fall', 'flucated', and 'experiences'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, including 'alteration' instead of 'change', 'revals' instead of 'reveals', 'flucates', and 'slows climbs'. While these errors do not seriously impede communication, they reflect limitations in precision and word formation. To improve, the student needs to pay closer attention to exact lexical choices, collocations, and correct spelling of standard graphical terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
There is a mix of simple and some complex sentence forms attempted within the response. A variety of structures are deployed to report trends, but there are some recurring errors in grammar, articles, and prepositions, such as 'in the January month' and 'at arounds1.5% prices'. Punctuation is also occasionally inconsistent with missing spaces after commas and conjunctions. Nevertheless, the errors are not overly frequent and rarely impede communication, allowing the reader to follow the intended meaning without severe difficulty. Greater control over complex sentence patterns and grammatical accuracy is needed for further advancement.
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