Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In the chart we see the changes of copper, nickel and zinc by which it is changes month by month As , copper price is change from 2% to 1% while from junary to june it is decreasing while from june to September it is at same rate but in the next month October to number it decreased but after that next months it is continusly increasing

Moreover, Nickel is increased on January month but from that month the price of nickel is decreasing from January to june but jn another way from july to September it is contiusly at same price but at another month it is start increasing

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies copper and nickel and attempts to describe changes over the year, but it does not provide a clear overview of the graph or cover all three metals: zinc is omitted entirely. Several details are inaccurate or unclear. Copper is described as decreasing from January to June, although it falls only to May and then remains around the same level through June; the claim that it decreases from October to November is also incorrect, as it is roughly stable. Nickel does fall sharply by June and stays low through September, but its later movement is not clearly reported. The response is also 40 words below the required minimum, leaving too little detail to summarise the main features adequately. Include an overview and compare the metals’ peaks, falls and recoveries.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response by discussing copper first and nickel second, and words such as “while,” “but” and “Moreover” signal some relationships between ideas. However, the response has no clear introduction or concluding overview, and the progression within the copper description is difficult to follow, particularly in “from june to September it is at same rate” and “October to number.” The second paragraph ends without completing the year’s account. Several ideas are joined in long, loosely punctuated sentences, while the repeated “from…to…” pattern makes the organisation mechanical. Use separate, complete sentences and group the metals’ main trends into a clear overview followed by focused details.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a small set of relevant terms, including “price,” “decreasing,” “increasing” and “same rate,” so the general subject is usually recognisable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often imprecise: “changes” is repeated, “at same rate” does not clearly mean that a figure remained stable, and “increased on January month” is an awkward way to describe a monthly change. Spelling errors such as “junary,” “continusly” and “contiusly” also reduce accuracy. Build a more varied set of chart-description expressions, such as “rose,” “fell,” “remained stable,” “reached a low,” and “recovered,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas using clauses with “while” and “but,” but most sentences are difficult to control and punctuation is weak. For example, “In the chart we see the changes … by which it is changes month by month As” contains an incomplete, confusing structure, while “from june to September it is at same rate” lacks an article and uses an unclear tense pattern. Verb forms and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “the price of nickel is decreasing from January to june” followed by “it is start increasing.” Use straightforward past-tense sentences to report the completed year, with accurate forms such as “Copper fell” and “Nickel remained stable.” Capitalise month names and use full stops to separate each trend.

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