Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph illustrates the average monthly change in the prices of copper, nickel and zinc during 2014.

Overall, nickel accounted highest prices in the first of the month than fluctuating changing in every month reduce our prices, while copper and zinc starts nearly to our prices than decreases our prices in every month respectively.

After analyzing the point it can be seen that, nickel starts with 6% in our first month than dropped to 4% changes in our prices in February. Therefore, the downfall continues fell to around 1% in May, while the copper shows 2% in January and than reach to near 1% in April than fluctuate reach to 2% in December. However, the nickel drops to -3% in June than jumps to 1% in December.

In contrast, zinc starts with 1% changes firstly than rise up to 3% in Feb after a while there is a huge changes in our price drop to -1% in June and than stable equally in next three months. Lastly, they rose up to 2% in our last month.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify all three metals and include several relevant figures, such as nickel’s 6% start and fall to −3% in June, and zinc’s rise to 3% in February. However, the overview is unclear and does not accurately summarise the main pattern: nickel did not decline in every month, since it recovered to 1% in November and December, while all three metals ended the year with positive changes. Some details are also inaccurate or imprecise: copper was about 0.5% in December, not 2%, and its January-to-April movement is not described clearly. To strengthen the response, give a concise, accurate overview of the metals’ contrasting movements and select the most important turning points.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs describing the metals. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “In contrast” signal a comparison. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because several ideas are joined in long, unclear sentences. For example, the overview’s “while copper and zinc starts nearly to our prices than decreases our prices” does not establish a clear comparison. Linking words such as “Therefore,” “However,” and “Lastly” are sometimes used where the relationship between ideas is not clear. Use shorter sentences, group information by meaningful stages, and make each comparison explicit to create a clearer progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “fluctuating,” “dropped,” “stable,” and “rose,” and you attempt to describe changes rather than simply list figures. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to understand. Phrases such as “accounted highest prices,” “in our prices,” and “a huge changes in our price” are not natural ways to describe percentage changes. Repetition of “than” and “changes” also reduces precision. Build a reliable set of chart-description expressions—for example, “recorded the highest monthly increase,” “fell to,” and “remained stable”—and check that each phrase accurately describes a change in the rate, rather than the price itself.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “while” and “after,” and the reader can identify some of the figures and trends. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, and articles make several statements hard to interpret. For instance, “nickel starts with 6% … than dropped to 4%” shifts tense and uses an incorrect comparison structure; “copper and zinc starts” also has subject–verb disagreement. The overview sentence is particularly difficult to parse. Use the past tense consistently for the 2014 data, check singular and plural subjects, and practise forming clear comparisons with patterns such as “Nickel fell from 6% to 4%.”

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