Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph shows the monthly change in the princes of three metals copper, zinc and nickel. Overall it is clear that price of nickel is so high as compared to the copper and Zinc at the point of F. but at the point of D its price will get same no major increase.

looking first at the nickel metal at the start point of J its price percentage is 6% as compred to the copper anf zinc thats mean its price increased so high in that certain period. after that when we move to the next point F copper price percentage is decreased from 6% to 4% but also high then other two metals. But its percentage can decreased at the point M and goes decreasing and never increased until at point D its price percentage stop at 1%.

on the other end the price percentage of copper and zinc fluctuated so many and remain constant at the point D where the percentage of copper is 1.5% and zinc percentage is 2%. So at the end the price percentage of zinc is high as compared to the nickel and copper.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the three metals and include a broad comparison, noting nickel’s high starting figure and zinc’s higher year-end figure. However, the account is only minimally successful because several key trends are misreported or unclear. Nickel falls sharply to about -3% in June, then recovers to around 1% by November and December; your statement that it “never increased” until December misses this recovery. Copper and zinc do not simply “fluctuated so many”: both turn negative around June, then rise again late in the year. The overview also says nickel is highest at February, although its peak is in January. Select the main stages accurately and give a clear overview of the sharp mid-year falls and late-year recovery.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic structure: an opening overview, a paragraph focused on nickel, and a final comparison of copper and zinc. Sequencing phrases such as “looking first” and “on the other end” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, progression is not consistently clear, partly because the months are referred to only by initials and the discussion shifts between metals without a well-defined comparison. The sentence beginning “after that when we move to the next point F” is especially confusing because it describes nickel’s fall as copper’s change. Some linking expressions are also awkward or repetitive. Organise the report into a clear overview followed by chronological comparisons, and use precise references such as “February” and “June.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “percentage,” “increased,” “decreased,” and “fluctuated,” so the reader can generally recognise that you are describing changes. However, the range is limited and several choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “price percentage” is not a natural way to describe the monthly rate of change, and “remain constant” does not accurately describe the metals’ changing figures. There are also spelling errors such as “princes” and “compred.” Aim for precise terms such as “monthly price change,” “rose,” “fell,” and “recovered,” and check spelling and natural word combinations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “when” and “where,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence structure and verb forms are frequent enough to make some relationships unclear. For instance, “at the point of D its price will get same” has an incomplete construction and an inappropriate future form for describing past data; “its percentage can decreased” also combines verb forms incorrectly. Articles and agreement are often missing or inaccurate, as in “price of nickel” and “the percentage of copper is.” Punctuation, especially around sentence boundaries, also needs attention. Practise describing past chart data with consistent past-tense verbs and build shorter, complete sentences before adding subordinate clauses.

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