Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph illustrate that the prices of three metals changed every month and had different percentage in every month. Every month change in prices of three metal copper, nickle and zinc in the year 2014. Every month had different ratio during year of 2014.

The graph illustrate that the graph gives information of three metals change the price compared with previous month the first metal was copper that started in janurary from the average of 2. Copper was fell down continue half year and was reached the average less than 0 after one month the average of copper slightly increased after three year had equal ratio from september so after october the copper slightly increased at the end of year in december average reached above than 1. The second metal was nickle the average of nickle started from the average of 6 and that average of prices continuely fell down every month at the last average of price reached 1. The third metal was zinc started the average of 1 in the first month average of price increased but after it the average continely decreased every month but at last the month of december the average increased its original value and reached the average of 2.

In the conclusion the information of three metals change the price of every month and discussed the ratio of every month copper and nickle decreased the average of the price but the zinc increased the price in the yaer of 2014.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify all three metals and report some broad movements, including nickel’s high starting point and zinc’s rise towards December. However, the account is only partially accurate and the main comparisons are not clearly selected. For example, copper did not fall continuously for half the year: it declined to around zero, dipped slightly below zero in May and June, then recovered. Nickel fell sharply to about −3% in June before ending near 1%, rather than simply declining every month. The overview also says copper and nickel decreased while zinc increased, which misses their late-year recoveries and the metals’ shared mid-year downturn. Focus on the overall pattern and key turning points, using accurate comparisons rather than repeating general statements about monthly change.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction to a longer account and a concluding statement. It also attempts to sequence information with phrases such as “the first metal,” “the second metal,” and “at last.” However, progression is weakened by repeated introductions and general statements: the first paragraph repeats that prices changed each month, and the next begins again with “The graph illustrate.” Connections between details are sometimes unclear, particularly “after three year had equal ratio from september,” which makes the timeline difficult to follow. Group the overview and key trends more purposefully, then use clear time markers such as “from January to June” and “in the final two months.” This would make the organisation easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use relevant basic terms such as “prices,” “increased,” “decreased,” and “average,” so the reader can recognise the topic and some trends. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear. “Different percentage in every month” and “different ratio” are imprecise for describing monthly price changes, while “copper was fell down” and “reached its original value” do not express the intended trends naturally. There are also spelling errors, including “nickle,” “janurary,” and “yaer.” Build a more precise set of chart-description phrases, such as “percentage change,” “fell to,” “recovered,” and “remained stable,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to describe changes over time and uses some longer sentences, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently affect clarity. Subject–verb agreement is inconsistent in “The graph illustrate,” and verb forms are faulty in “copper was fell down” and “the average … continuely fell down.” Articles and sentence construction are also problematic, as in “started the average of 1” and “after one month the average of copper slightly increased.” Most sentences rely on simple patterns, with limited accurate use of complex clauses. Practise forming clear past-tense sentences with a subject and verb—for example, “Copper fell to around −0.5% in May”—and use linking clauses only when their grammar is secure.

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