Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the given bar chat illustrates the average monthly fluction in the prices of three different metals in 2014.

overall, the bar chart shows that the maximum change in price of copper,nickel and zinc compared with previous month in january,january and feburary respectivey. The minimum change in prices of copper,nickel and zinc are may,june and june respectively.

The line graph shows that the priced of cooper is higher at 6 in Januarary and then they fall at 1 in may, the next month remain unchanged sfter that the are decreasing at -3 in june then rise in july at -1 and next 3 months remain unchaged after that they are dereasing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the chart’s subject and attempts an overview, but it does not accurately report the main features. It says copper reached 6 in January, although that figure belongs to nickel; copper was about 2%. The stated minimum months are also inaccurate: copper’s lowest changes were in May and June, while nickel and zinc reached their lowest points in June. The account then focuses mainly on nickel, despite calling it copper, and gives little information about zinc or the later-year recovery. The response is 104 words, below the required 150, and this limits its coverage. To improve, select the key highs, lows and shared trends, and support the overview with accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and then a description of the graph. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview repeats the metals’ names without clearly distinguishing their trends, and the final paragraph shifts between copper and nickel. For example, “The line graph shows that the priced of cooper is higher at 6” conflicts with the earlier reference to copper and makes the subject unclear. Linking phrases such as “then” and “after that” provide some sequence, but are repetitive and do not clarify the comparisons. Use separate, logically grouped details for each metal or for shared periods, with clear references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “average monthly,” “prices,” “change,” and “remain unchanged,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors reduce clarity, such as “bar chat,” “fluction,” “cooper,” “un chaged,” and “dereasing.” “Bar chart” is also an inaccurate label for the visual, which is a line graph. Repeated use of “change” and “rise” leaves comparisons imprecise, while “higher at 6” does not clearly express a percentage change. Build a more accurate range for describing movement, such as “fell,” “recovered,” and “fluctuated,” and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts connected sentences and uses some sequencing, but grammatical control is inconsistent. Errors include “the priced of cooper is higher,” where the noun form and sentence structure are faulty, and “the next month remain unchanged,” where the verb does not agree with its subject. In “then rise in july at -1,” the subject is unclear and the tense is inconsistent with the surrounding past-tense description. Several sentences also run together without reliable punctuation, particularly the final sequence of changes. These problems make some relationships between figures difficult to understand. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and subject–verb agreement, and use shorter, complete sentences before attempting more complex comparisons.

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