Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrates the average changes in the prices fo the three metals ( Copper, Nickel and Zinc), monthly vise, in 2014.

Overall, the Nickel droped sharply even in the negative way. The other metals like Copper and Zinc flustrated in the given time period.

At the beginning of year, the Nickle had the largest shared which is approximatly at 6%. Mid of the year, thwe same metal reached at the -3%, and the last of the year the Nickel accounted for the 1% after experienced the most dept. In contrast, Copper had the second postion, started from the 2%, experienced the down fall and reached at -0.5% at in the middle of the year. In December, Copper climbed and came at 1.5%.

Zinc was another metal which was accounted the least percentage. It was beginned from the 1% at the start of the year. The metal flustruated and faced the decreament at -1% in the half of the year. At th end of the year, the Zinc had the highest price at 2%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main overall pattern: nickel falls markedly, while copper and zinc fluctuate, and you include several relevant figures, such as nickel’s opening 6% and mid-year low of about -3%. The closing comparisons are also useful: copper rises to around 1.5%, while zinc reaches about 2%. However, coverage is uneven and some descriptions are unclear or inaccurate. Copper is not consistently the second-highest series, and zinc is not simply the least throughout; nickel leads early, while zinc is highest at year-end. The overview also misses the shared mid-year downturn and the recovery in both nickel and zinc late in the year. Select the main stages more precisely and compare the series directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of the metals. Time markers such as “At the beginning of year,” “Mid of the year,” and “In December” help the reader follow the chronology, while “In contrast” signals a comparison. However, the progression is sometimes awkward because the account moves through each metal separately without consistently linking their shared changes. Some references are also unclear, particularly “the same metal” and “the most dept.” Grouping the early-year trends, the mid-year falls, and the late-year recovery would create a more coherent comparison. Use linking phrases selectively and make each reference explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of task-related vocabulary, including “illustrates,” “fluctuated,” “reached,” “climbed,” and “in contrast.” However, frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices reduce precision and sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow: “droped,” “flustrated,” “shared,” and “dept” appear to be intended as “dropped,” “fluctuated,” “share,” and “depth.” Several combinations are also unnatural, such as “the largest shared” and “faced the decreament.” Aim for accurate, conventional language for describing data, such as “recorded the largest increase,” “fell to,” and “recovered.” Proofreading spelling and checking collocations would make your vocabulary more effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some longer sentence forms, including “In contrast, Copper had the second postion, started from the 2%, experienced the down fall…” and “The metal flustruated and faced the decreament…”. However, these structures are often faulty, and several basic grammatical patterns are also inaccurate. Examples include “At the beginning of year” (missing an article), “reached at the -3%” (incorrect preposition pattern), and “It was beginned from the 1%” (incorrect verb form and construction). Sentence boundaries and punctuation are generally understandable, but the repeated errors make relationships between actions less clear. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and simpler sentence patterns before adding multiple clauses.

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