Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.0)

the graph illustrate the monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

firstly in january copper 2 % rise occur in the price of copper while in march zinc also reach at the same percentage.furhtermore in the month of december zinc also reach at the same percentage.the other metal nickel gain one percent rise in the price about 1 percent.but in june nickel seem a great reduction in the price about -3 percent but it will gain its state and get arise 1 percent in the month of december.a intrusting point about copper is that it maintain its price at the 1 percent in the month of july,august and september.comapratively nickel will consistently at low percentage of -1 percent in the month of july,august and september.the highest rise in price nickle about 6 percent in the month of january.further nikle aslo seem a decrease about

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify several relevant figures, including copper’s 2% rise in January, nickel’s peak of about 6% in January, and nickel’s fall to around -3% in June. However, the response does not provide a clear overview of the main pattern across the year, and some comparisons are inaccurate: zinc was about 2% in March but about 3% in February, while it reached about 2% in December, not the same percentage as March. The final sentence is unfinished, and the response contains 137 words, below the required 150; 10 words copied from the task prompt were excluded from that count. Develop a concise overview and select a few accurate highs, lows, and shared trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is some chronological organisation, with references moving from January and March to June, July–September, and December. Linking expressions such as “furthermore” and “but” also show an attempt to connect information. However, the response reads largely as one continuous sequence rather than a clearly structured report: there is no distinct overview, and several ideas are joined without clear relationships. The unfinished ending, “further nikle aslo seem a decrease about,” interrupts progression and leaves the final point unclear. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and selected details, and group related comparisons together—for example, the metals’ shared declines around June and their recovery toward the end of the year.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “monthly change,” “reduction,” “consistently,” and “highest rise,” so the reader can recognise that you are describing movements in prices. There are also attempts to vary expression, such as “gain” and “maintain.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing a line graph: “gain one percent rise” and “get arise” are unclear, while “gain its state” does not convey a precise trend. Spelling errors such as “furhtermore,” “comapratively,” and “nikle” are noticeable, and the final phrase is incomplete. Choose standard trend language and check spelling carefully to make the limited range more reliable.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences linked with words such as “while,” “but,” and “that.” This shows some effort to vary sentence structure. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors often make the relationships between figures difficult to follow. For example, “the graph illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, “a intrusting point … is that it maintain” has article and verb-form problems, and “nickel will consistently at low percentage” is missing a main verb. Capitalisation and punctuation are also weak, with most sentences beginning in lowercase and several ideas run together. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and complete sentence patterns before adding more complex clauses.

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