Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
X-axis here represent the change in prices of three metals copper,nickel,zinc over a 12 months of an year.While the y-axis represent the percentage change in price compared with the previous month.At start of january ,the percentage price of nickel compared with previous month is very high as compared with copper and the zinc is little less than the copper.In feberary ,the percentage price of nickel and copper is fall as the price of zinc increased to some extent.Onwards till june,the percentage prices of copper,zinc,and nickel decreased.The percentage price of nickel is lowest in july while the percentage prices of zinc and copper are also decreased to some extent but still have high percentage price than niickel.the percentage price of nickel is linear from july to september and also the price of coppert and zinc is also remain same to some extent.In october ,the percentage price of nickel is less tha the other two metals.Through the year there is an large decrease in the price of nickel while the price of copper and zinc are increased or decreased slowly.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You identify the graph’s subject and mention several relevant movements, including nickel’s high starting point, its fall to a low in June, and the metals’ relatively small changes later in the year. However, the account only partially selects and reports the main features. It does not give a clear overview of the overall pattern, and some comparisons are inaccurate: nickel reaches its lowest point in June, not July, and copper and zinc do not continue decreasing through June in the same way. The final statement that nickel shows a large decrease across the year also overlooks its recovery in November and December. A clearer overview and a few accurate figures would make the key trends more convincing.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response follows a broadly chronological order, moving from January through October, and uses time markers such as “In February,” “Onwards till June,” and “In October” to guide the reader. However, it is presented as one continuous paragraph, with no distinct overview or clear grouping of the main trends. Several transitions are awkward or repetitive, and the repeated phrase “the percentage price of” makes the progression feel mechanical. The account also stops at October before making a general year-end statement, leaving the sequence incomplete. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and two trend-focused paragraphs, and use clearer links to show contrasts between the metals.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use relevant basic terms such as “percentage change,” “increased,” “decreased,” and “lowest,” so the reader can generally understand that you are describing price movements. However, the vocabulary is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, including “percentage price,” “linear” for a stable trend, and “large decrease” where a more precise description is needed. Spelling errors such as “feberary,” “niickel,” and “coppert” also reduce accuracy. Build a more varied set of trend expressions, for example “rose,” “fell,” “remained stable,” “recovered,” and “fluctuated,” and use “monthly percentage change” rather than “percentage price.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt to combine ideas in longer sentences, for example by contrasting nickel’s fall with changes in zinc and copper. However, the range of structures is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “X-axis here represent” and “the y-axis represent,” where subject–verb agreement is incorrect, as well as “the price of nickel is linear from July to September,” which has an unsuitable verb construction. Articles, plurals, and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “over a 12 months of an year” and the missing spaces after commas. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then connect them with controlled clauses using “while,” “whereas,” and “by contrast.”
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