Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph compare the defrent monthly prices for defrent three metals (cooper, nickle and zinc) through out the year 2014.

overall, cooper is dominent through out the period with smal decrease from january up to may as well as zinc which started with sharp increase from janury to febroury but gradually decrease up to june. for the nickel, the price was reletively higher at the begining but decreased significantly during this period.

for zinc, which his avarage price started at 1% in January with rocket increase up to 3% in Febroury. after that there is gradyaly decreased to -1% by june and kepet steady through up to october. followed by skyroket increase by 2% in december.

for the cooper nickle, which started with excelent price at 6% in january, which start dramatacly crushing up to 1% by march, then went steady with suden decrease up to 0.5% by may then start falling by -3% in June followed by -1% in July and balanced through out up to september.

regarding the copper as well followed the same pattren but with small decrease as the prices decreased significantly from january to June and increased again from july and become relatively stable for the remaining months.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the three metals and include a general overview, noting nickel’s high starting point and the broad decline and later recovery in the other series. However, the overview is not consistently accurate: copper does not remain dominant throughout, since nickel is much higher at the start, and copper’s changes are modest rather than a clear overall decrease through June. Some details are also missing or imprecise. For example, nickel falls to about -3% in June, then rises to around 1% in November and remains there in December; the response mentions the fall and July–September stability but omits the late recovery. Report the main comparisons more precisely and distinguish the metals’ different patterns.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, an overview and separate paragraphs for zinc, nickel and copper, so there is some organisation and the reader can identify the intended subjects. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the overview groups copper and zinc together, while the later paragraphs describe them separately, and the final paragraph returns to copper after discussing nickel. Linking phrases such as “after that,” “followed by” and “regarding” help show sequence, but they are sometimes repetitive or attached to incomplete, confusing sentences. For example, “for the cooper nickle” makes it unclear whether the paragraph is about one metal or both. Organise the body in a consistent order and use clear comparisons between series.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of descriptive language, including “gradually,” “significantly,” “relatively stable” and “sharp increase,” which is relevant to describing a line graph. However, many spelling errors and inaccurate or informal choices make the account harder to follow, such as “defrent,” “domin ent,” “rocket increase,” “skyroket” and “crushing.” Some expressions are also unsuitable for neutral data reporting: “excellent price” does not describe a percentage change, and “balanced” is unclear for a stable figure. Use standard spellings and precise terms such as “rose,” “fell,” “fluctuated” and “remained stable.” This would make the vocabulary more reliable and appropriately academic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts longer sentences and time relationships, but sentence structures are often faulty, and errors frequently make relationships between ideas difficult to interpret. For example, “The line graph compare” has subject–verb disagreement, while “for zinc, which his average price started” is not a complete, well-formed clause. Several sentences begin with fragments such as “followed by skyroket increase” and “regarding the copper,” and tense and article use are inconsistent. The repeated use of “which” also creates unclear sentence connections. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use simple past consistently for the 2014 data before adding more complex clauses.

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