Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph below illustrates the average metal price changed in month during 2014.

Overall, nickel was stand on the high in starting month although zinc is on average and copper at starting month on the one percentage up but sudden increased in next month.

Futhermore, nickel in the January has highest 6% in all metals but it direct decline 6 to 1 in March and same prise in next month then slighlty declined in May and then sharply declined in very next month in June on -3% then rose increased in July -1% or remain same in next thee months at the end 15 declined and the raise away with a passage of time but at the end in December it stand on 15%. although copper prising percentage in January it standed on 2% but with a passage of time it decreased and in March copper directly drop to 0.4% in April and then again declined in next two months or sudden increased in prise 1% and than small decreased and than direct increase in last month 1.2%.

Moreover, zink in January on 2% and in February on 3% and than decreasing and on the December it increased 2%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the three metals and include some relevant figures, such as nickel’s January peak of 6% and its fall to around -3% in June. However, the account only partially reports the graph’s main features, and the overview is unclear: “nickel was stand on the high” does not clearly summarise the overall pattern. Several details are inaccurate or confusing. For example, copper is about 0.5% in both March and April, rather than dropping to 0.4% in March; nickel is around 1% in December, not “15%”; and zinc begins at about 1%, not 2%. The description also gives little clear comparison between the metals. Select the major shared pattern and key contrasts, then report figures accurately and explain what they show.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: you begin with an introduction, attempt an overview, and then discuss nickel, copper and zinc. This gives the reader a basic sense of the response’s subject. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the overview is unclear and most of the data is packed into long, loosely connected sentences. The nickel paragraph, for instance, moves through many months using repeated “then” and “and,” while phrases such as “at the end 15 declined” make the sequence hard to interpret. Use separate, focused paragraphs for an overview and the main trends, and group related months rather than listing every movement. Clearer sentence boundaries and more precise links between comparisons would improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “declined,” “increased,” “highest,” and “percentage,” so the reader can recognise that you are describing changes. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “was stand on the high,” “same prise,” “rose increased,” and “with a passage of time.” Spelling errors such as “Futhermore,” “slighlty,” and “zink” also reduce accuracy. Aim for a smaller set of precise graph-description terms used correctly, such as “peaked at,” “fell to,” “remained stable,” and “recovered.” Check spelling and avoid combining near-synonyms, as in “rose increased.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts longer sentences and some sequencing, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently make the message difficult to follow. Verb forms are often incorrect, as in “nickel was stand” and “it standed on 2%”; articles and sentence structure are also problematic in “nickel in the January has highest 6%.” Several clauses run together without clear punctuation, particularly the long account of nickel, so it is hard to identify where one idea ends and another begins. There is little evidence of reliably controlled complex structures. Build accurate simple sentences first—for example, “Nickel stood at 6% in January, then fell to 1% in March”—and use full stops to separate each metal’s main trend.

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