Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

THE GIVEN GRAPH ILLUSTRATES MONYHLY CHANGE IN PRICES OF THREE VALUABLE METALS NAMELY-COPPER,NICKEL,ZINC IN 2014.

OVERALL THESE METALS SHOWS DRASTICAL CHANGE IN EVERY MONTH WHILE COPPER KEEP RISING AT THE END.

THOUG PRICE OF ZINC HAS SHOWN A GROWING TREND FROM THE FIRST MONTH APPROXIMATELY 3% BUT IT COULD NOT MAKE IT THROUGH THE MIDDLE OF THE YEAR WHEN IT FALLS AT JULY AT -1%.IN JULY NICKEL SHOWS THE LOWER MOST PRICE WHICH IS ALMOST DOUBLE THAN COPPER ABOUT -3% IN CONTRAST TO JANUARY WHEN THE PROPORTION OF NIKEL WAS HIGHER UP TO 5%.PRICE OF COPPER REMAINS UNSTEADY FROM JUNE TO SEPTEMBER AND NOT MORE THAN 1% AND PARALLEL TO OTHER TWO METALS.

IN CONCLUSION, MOST OF THE METALS ARE CHANGES THEIR PRICE RAPIDLY ALL OVER THE YEAR WHETHER BY RISING OR WITH A DECREASING PERCENTAGE. CONSEQUENTLY, THE COMPARISON AMONG THESE METALS HAS NO SIGNIFICANT DIFFERENCES MORE THAN 2% DUE TO THEIR MOVEABLE TREN

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the three metals and make an attempt at an overview, noting that copper rises towards the end and that nickel falls sharply. However, the main features are only partly reported, and some comparisons are inaccurate or unclear. Zinc begins at about 1%, not approximately 3%, and its lowest point is in June at around -1%, rather than July. Nickel is also lowest in June, not July; its January change is about 6%, rather than 5%. The claim that differences are generally no more than 2% is not supported by the large gaps early in the year. To strengthen the response, give a clear overview of the metals’ contrasting patterns and select accurate key figures to support it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details and a concluding statement. This gives the reader some sense of organisation, and phrases such as “In contrast” attempt to show comparison. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the discussion shifts between zinc, nickel and copper without a systematic sequence, and the conclusion largely repeats the general idea of change rather than summarising the main trends. Some linking is awkward or unclear, as in “In July nickel shows the lower most price … in contrast to January.” Organise the body by a clear pattern—for example, compare the early-year peaks, mid-year falls and late-year recovery—and use references that make each comparison easy to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “monthly change,” “rising,” “falls” and “comparison,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to interpret. “DRASTICAL change,” “lower most price,” “moveable trend” and “parallel to other two metals” are not natural descriptions of the data; “price” is also sometimes used where “percentage change” would be more precise. Spelling errors such as “MONYHLY,” “NIKEL” and “THOUG” further reduce clarity. Aim for accurate, conventional chart language and use a small range of precise terms consistently, such as “fluctuated,” “fell to,” “recovered” and “remained relatively stable.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “while” and a comparison introduced by “in contrast.” However, errors are frequent, and some sentences are difficult to follow. Examples include “these metals shows,” where the verb does not agree with its subject, and “most of the metals are changes their price,” which has an incorrect verb construction. Missing or misplaced punctuation also causes run-on sentences, particularly in the paragraph beginning “Though price of zinc.” Articles and sentence boundaries need more consistent control. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine related points with accurate clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, verb forms and punctuation before finishing.

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