Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph illustrate the per month average different in the prices of three metals period 2014.

Overall, there have three items in graph which thoes copper, nickel and zinc.

First of all, graph show the 3 things like: copper, nickel and zinc. In this graph, nickel are more high (%) in previous month almost 6% but zinc started 1% in the previous month and after the sometime zinc (%) up to 3% in february and copper started 2% in January and after the some period copper are more down.

Another hand, copper are more down when copper are start in January then his persentage almost 2% after the some duration spend, almost in october started up side and futher growing and the end in december and persentage 2%. But nickel are most decrese as compair to copper and zinc. Nickel lowest persentage in june is around -3% and after some time in october -2% pervious month. Zinc are persentage different those metals his persentage almost decrease in june and growing up in november his almost 2%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify all three metals and include some relevant figures, such as nickel’s peak of about 6% in January and its low of around -3% in June. You also note that zinc rises in February and that the metals recover towards the end of the year. However, the response does not give a clear, accurate overview of the main pattern: all three metals fall into negative monthly changes around June, then generally recover, while nickel shows the greatest fluctuations. Some details are inaccurate or unclear; for example, copper is described as reaching 2% in December, whereas the graph shows about 1.5%, and its rise is said to begin in October even though it is already around 1% from July to September. Select the key trends and report them precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from an opening statement to comments about the metals, and it uses a few signposts such as “Overall,” “First of all,” and “Another hand.” These help the reader recognise some shifts in focus. However, the ideas are not arranged into a clear comparison of the year’s main stages, and several points are repeated: the opening and the next paragraph both list the three metals, while copper’s decline is described more than once. Connections between sentences are often unclear, particularly in “after the sometime zinc (%) up to 3%” and “his almost 2%.” Group the information into a concise overview and logically ordered comparisons, using clear references to each metal.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “prices,” “percentage,” “decrease,” and “growing,” and you attempt to compare the metals. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to follow. Phrases such as “average different,” “more high,” “most decrese,” and “his persentage” are not natural or precise for describing a graph. Spelling errors, including “compair” and “persentage,” also reduce clarity. Build a small set of accurate trend expressions—such as “rose to,” “fell to,” “remained stable,” and “recovered”—and use them with the correct metal and figure.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form connected sentences and use some time references, but sentence structures are mostly simple or incomplete, and errors occur frequently enough to make several statements hard to interpret. Examples include “The graph illustrate,” “there have three items,” and “nickel are more high,” where subject–verb agreement and sentence construction are faulty. Articles and prepositions are also often missing or incorrectly used, as in “in graph” and “in previous month.” The long sentence beginning “Another hand” combines several ideas without clear grammatical control. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then use controlled comparisons such as “Nickel fell to -3% in June, while copper and zinc declined less sharply.”

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