Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graph shows, the average monthly change in the prices of copper, nickel andzink during 2014.

Overall, in the starting opint Nickel had the highest fuger as compare zink and copper, while the Zink hade lowest point in given diagram. It is also noticeable that in ending point the Nickel recording decrease, Zink notice to highest point.

In january Nickel accounted to the highest fegur and zink had cheapest. While in feburaty the Zink has increased the average price

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response identifies the graph’s subject and makes a basic comparison, noting that nickel is highest at the start and that zinc rises towards the end. However, it gives very little coverage of the year: the only specific monthly comparison is January, and the February comment is unfinished and does not report a clear figure. The overview also misstates the ending: nickel finishes at about +1%, not with a decrease, while zinc reaches about +2% in December. The response is only 71 words, below the required 150; the nine words copied from the prompt are excluded from that count. To improve, provide a complete overview and select key rises, falls, and comparisons across the year.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with an opening sentence, an overview beginning “Overall,” and a move to monthly details. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, the response stops after an incomplete February point, so there is no clear progression through the main stages of the year or a concluding comparison. Connections between ideas are also awkward: “while” is used to join fragments, and “It is also noticeable” does not clearly connect the ending trend to the preceding overview. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the introduction, overview, and selected details, and link comparisons explicitly with phrases such as “by contrast” or “whereas.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses a few relevant terms, including “average monthly change,” “highest,” “lowest point,” and “increased,” showing some awareness of the language needed to describe a graph. However, vocabulary is limited and several choices or spellings make the meaning unclear, such as “starting opint,” “highest fuger,” “cheapest,” and “Zink.” “Cheapest” is not suitable for describing a percentage change; “lowest change” or “smallest figure” would be more accurate. The phrase “Nickel recording decrease” is also an imprecise way to describe a trend. Build a small range of accurate trend vocabulary—rise, fall, fluctuate, recover, peak—and use correct metal names and collocations consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writer attempts more than one sentence pattern, including an overall comparison with “while” and a time reference beginning “In January.” Some basic meaning can be followed, but sentence construction is often incomplete or inaccurate. For example, “Overall, in the starting opint Nickel had the highest fuger as compare zink and copper” lacks a grammatical comparison form, while “While in feburaty the Zink has increased the average price” is a dependent clause without a completed main clause. The opening also has an unnecessary comma after “shows.” Practise complete subject–verb sentences and accurate comparative structures, such as “Nickel recorded the highest change in January, whereas copper had the lowest.”

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