Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph illustratres the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Overall, average monthly change in prices is mostly appear in nickel and other two metal prices falling slightly after every month. In comparison, price of nickel rapidly decreased in june than others.

In the first month, prices of copper,nickel,zinc changed. Nickel 6%, Zinc 1% and Copper 2%. In 2nd month and 3rd month, nickel 4% to1%, zinc 3%to 2% and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and include some accurate figures, such as nickel at 6% and copper at 2% in January, followed by nickel at 4% and zinc at 3% in February. However, the response is incomplete: it stops mid-sentence after “zinc 3%to 2% and” and does not summarise the remaining months or give a clear, accurate overview of the metals’ overall patterns. The overview’s claim that the other two metals’ prices fell slightly “after every month” is not supported by the chart, since both rise again towards the end of the year. The required minimum of 150 words is not met; 12 words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count. Develop the key trends and comparisons across the full year.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with an opening sentence, an overview beginning “Overall,” and a paragraph describing early-year figures. This gives the reader some indication of the intended structure. However, the progression is very limited: the account ends abruptly with “and,” leaving the comparison unfinished, and there is no coverage of the later months. Connections between ideas are also unclear; for example, “In comparison” does not introduce a precise contrast, and the overview’s reference to “other two metal prices” is difficult to follow. Use complete paragraphs to separate the overview from selected details, and connect comparisons explicitly by month or trend.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “average monthly change,” “prices,” “decreased,” and the metal names, so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or awkward, such as “illustratres,” “prices is mostly appear,” and “other two metal prices falling slightly.” The phrase “changed” is also too vague for reporting specific movements, while “rapidly decreased” could be expressed more precisely as a sharp fall. These issues sometimes make the intended meaning harder to understand. Aim for accurate trend language such as “rose,” “fell,” “remained stable,” and “recovered,” and check spelling and natural combinations of words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and a longer overview sentence, but grammatical control is inconsistent and the range remains limited. For example, “average monthly change in prices is mostly appear” has an incorrect verb construction, and “other two metal prices” lacks appropriate plural and article forms. The sentence “In 2nd month and 3rd month, nickel 4% to1%, zinc 3%to 2% and” is not a complete sentence: it has no clear verb and ends unfinished. Punctuation and spacing around commas and percentages are also inconsistent. Build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example, “Nickel fell from 6% in January to 4% in February,” and proofread agreement, articles, and sentence endings.

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