Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graphs illustates the average monthly change inthe rates of three metals during 2014.

fristly,in the month of j nickel prices was higest 6%,however, the lowest prices was 3% in the same month j for same metal also nickel was fluctuated with prices in another months.Furthermore,the metal of copper was high in j month excetly 2%,on the other side decresed 0.5% in D month.

Lastly,zinc was rise up in f month 3% and down in O month -1%.In addition all three metals were fluctuated in another years.

To sum up, zinc,nickel and copper were almost same just littelbit differance they show and month was also different as well as in the month of j in middle part three of them decresed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify all three metals and include a few relevant figures, such as nickel’s 6% rise in January and zinc’s 3% rise in February. However, the response only minimally summarises the graph: it gives no clear overview of the main pattern, and several details are inaccurate or unclear. For example, copper fell to about -0.5% in May and June, not December; its December change was positive, at roughly 1.5%. The claim that all three metals decreased in the middle of the year is also too broad, as copper rose from July and zinc’s changes were less negative. The response is 28 words below the required minimum. To improve, report the overall contrast between nickel’s large fluctuations and copper’s relatively small changes, then support it with accurate comparisons across the year.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with an opening sentence, a sequence of points introduced by “Firstly,” “Furthermore,” and “Lastly,” and a concluding sentence. This gives the reader some sense of structure. However, the ideas do not progress clearly from an overview to well-selected comparisons, and the conclusion repeats a vague claim that the metals were “almost same” rather than summarising the main trends. Some linking phrases are used inaccurately or mechanically, and references such as “the same month j” and “another months” make relationships difficult to follow. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the key details, and connect comparisons explicitly—for example, contrast nickel’s sharp fall with copper’s smaller changes.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a small range of task-related vocabulary, including “average monthly change,” “prices,” “decreased,” and “fluctuated,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, vocabulary is limited and repeated, while several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand: “illustates,” “higest,” “decresed,” and “littelbit” are examples. Some expressions are also unnatural, such as “was rise up” and “the metal of copper was high.” Aim for precise language for describing data, including “rose,” “fell,” “remained stable,” and “reached a peak.” Check spelling carefully and use the correct form of each word; this will make your comparisons clearer and more appropriate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to form longer sentences using connectors such as “however,” “Furthermore,” and “In addition,” but the range of sentence structures remains limited and errors are frequent. For instance, “nickel prices was higest” has subject–verb agreement problems, while “zinc was rise up” uses an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “To sum up” also combines several ideas without clear grammatical relationships. Punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, which further affects readability. Practise accurate simple past forms for the year’s data, such as “Nickel rose” and “Copper fell,” before combining clauses. Use full stops to separate comparisons, and check agreement, articles, and verb forms in each sentence.

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