Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph compares the average of monthly changes occured in the price of three metal during 2014.

Overall Nickle faced a dramticaly decline in prices while copper and zinc went lowest down.

Nickle propotional were in huge demand in between other metals, in the begining of years in january it was at 6% and then dropped in feb 4% and its slowly moved down until in october -2% and then in november itwent up 1 % and then stabled in december.

While the zinc started from 1% and then in significantly increased and reachead 3% and it also slide down next eight months and then marginally increased in next two months and 2%. Meanwhile copper slightly above from zinc it started in january 2% and then faced ups and down next few month in december it reached near 2%.

However nickle faced a huge declincned the whole year.while copper and zinc stabled after little down .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the three metals and report several important movements, including nickel’s high starting point and sharp fall to a negative figure, followed by a recovery, as well as zinc’s rise early in the year and copper’s relatively small changes. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: copper and zinc did not both “went lowest down”; both fell below zero around June, but later recovered. The claim that nickel was “in huge demand” is not supported by a graph showing price changes, and saying it declined “the whole year” conflicts with its November recovery. Some figures and periods are also imprecise, such as zinc’s rise to 3% being described without a clear month. A clearer overview and more accurate comparisons would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the graph, gives an overview, and then describes nickel, zinc and copper. This gives the reader some sense of how the metals changed over the year. However, progression is not consistently clear, and the final sentence repeats the overview rather than adding a useful comparison. Linking words such as “While,” “and then” and “Meanwhile” are used, but the repeated “and then” makes the account feel like a list, while some connections are confusing—for example, “copper slightly above from zinc.” Separate, clearly focused paragraphs and a more systematic comparison of the first and second halves of the year would improve organisation and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “decline,” “dropped,” “increased,” “slide down” and “stabled.” This shows an attempt to vary the language rather than relying only on “went up” and “went down.” However, word choice and spelling errors are frequent and sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow: “Nickle,” “dramticaly,” “propotional” and “declincned” are examples. Several expressions are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “huge demand” for a price-change graph and “went lowest down.” Aim for accurate trend language and standard collocations, and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “fell,” “recovered” and “remained stable” would help communicate the data clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to combine ideas using clauses and time expressions, as in “While the zinc started from 1% and then…” and “it also slide down next eight months.” However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, articles, plurals and punctuation can make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “it also slide down” needs a past-tense verb, while “next eight months” requires an article or determiner. The long nickel sentence joins many events with “and then” without clear punctuation, and “copper slightly above from zinc” lacks a complete grammatical structure. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then add accurate clauses to show comparisons and changes over time.

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