Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line chart illustrates the average monthly change in the expenditure of three metals such as copper nickel and zinc between 2014.

Overall, It is evident from the graph, the nickel price considerably change in five month while, june month is has fell significantly and next three month remained same then increase the rate in december. Although, The copper expenditure frustuated in all month. After that, zinc price increased in feburary and decreased in june month then accounted price .

Initially, The nickle price started the 6 percentage then dropdown the june in only -3 proportion while next three month the value of price remained unchanged then decline and last month value increase significantly .

In contrast, copper price the 2 ration

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the three metals and report some relevant movements, including nickel’s high starting point and sharp fall to around -3% in June. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the overview is unclear, and several descriptions are inaccurate or incomplete. Nickel did not remain unchanged for three months after June; it stayed near -1% from July to September, then fell in October before rising. The copper section stops after “the 2 ration,” and zinc’s later movements are not properly reported. The response also contains 122 words, below the required 150, leaving important comparisons undeveloped. To improve, give a clear overview of the shared mid-year decline and late-year recovery, then compare the metals using accurate key figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: you begin with an introduction and overview, then move to details, and use markers such as “Overall,” “Initially,” and “In contrast.” These help signal the intended structure. However, progression is difficult to follow because the overview combines several ideas in long, unclear sentences, and the final paragraph ends abruptly after “the 2 ration.” Connections between points are sometimes inaccurate or incomplete, such as “After that” introducing zinc without clearly linking its trend to the previous comparison. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the overview and the main data comparisons, and organise details by time period or by metal. Clearer links between sentences would make the report easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt task-related vocabulary, including “price,” “percentage,” “increased,” “decreased,” and “remained unchanged,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is basic and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “expenditure” refers to spending rather than metal prices, “dropdown” is not the appropriate verb for a falling trend, and “accounted price” does not communicate a clear change. Spelling errors such as “frustuated,” “feburary,” and “nickle” also reduce accuracy. Build a small set of precise chart verbs and nouns, and check spelling; for example, describe prices as rising, falling, fluctuating, or remaining stable.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentence forms, including a contrast with “Although” and a sequence introduced by “while,” but control is weak and errors frequently obscure the intended meaning. Examples include “the nickel price considerably change,” “june month is has fell,” and “the value of price remained unchanged then decline,” where verb forms and sentence construction are faulty. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, and the final sentence is incomplete. Practise writing short, complete comparisons first, using past-tense forms consistently for the 2014 data: for example, “Nickel fell to -3% in June, then recovered to -1% in July.” Once these are accurate, add a limited number of complex sentences.

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