Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graphs illustrate the average monthly changes in the price of three different metal product copper, nickle and zinc in the year 2014.

Overall,we can seen that all metal product price declined with fluctuation in between over the period, nickel recorded highest price in january, whereas zinc was lowest.

In january, most price changes in january, around 6%, this number gradually decreased from 6% to 1% in march, they are then declined again to -3% in jun. After a long time these figure goup to -1% in just month year. this number stable with 1% in last 3 months, after stableling it was suddnely increased to 1% in december.

Similarly, the figure for copper approximately 2% changed in january. this number declined to around 1% in july, after 6 months this figure increased to 2% in last months. In addition, the changing price in january at 1%, it was increased to 3% in just 1 month, they are then, this figure declined to approximately -1% in october. After a long time this number was gradually increased to around 2% in december.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the three metals and attempt an overview, but the main features are not reported accurately or clearly enough. The statement that all prices “declined” overlooks their recovery towards the end of the year, and saying zinc was lowest does not capture the key comparison: nickel began far higher than the others and later fell sharply. The body gives some relevant figures, such as nickel’s fall to about -3% in June and zinc’s rise to 3% in February, but several descriptions are inaccurate or confusing. For example, copper is said to rise to 2% in the final months, although it reaches about 1.5% in December, and the nickel timeline is unclear. Select the major peaks, troughs and overall movements, and describe each series precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, with an introduction, an overview and two body paragraphs, and it attempts to group the metals for comparison. However, the progression within the body is difficult to follow because several sentences use unclear references such as “this number” and “these figure,” leaving the reader unsure which metal or month is being discussed. The repeated transitions “After a long time” and “Similarly” do not always show the actual relationship between the data. Some information is also presented in an unclear sequence, particularly the account of nickel’s recovery and final months. Organise the details by metal or by shared stages, and use explicit references such as “the nickel figure” and accurate month-to-month links.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “average monthly changes,” “declined,” “increased” and “stable,” so the general subject is understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the data hard to interpret. Phrases such as “metal product price,” “most price changes” and “this number stable” are not natural ways to describe percentage movements. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “nickle,” “goup,” “suddnely” and “stableling.” Build a more precise set of terms for describing trends and values, such as “percentage change,” “fell to,” “recovered to” and “remained stable,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “whereas,” “after” and “in addition,” but the range of sentence structures remains limited and these attempts are often faulty. Errors in verb forms and sentence construction occur throughout: “we can seen,” “they are then declined,” and “this number stable” are examples. Agreement and article use are also inconsistent, as in “all metal product price” and “these figure.” Punctuation and capitalisation are uneven, with several sentences beginning with lowercase “this” and commas joining ideas that need clearer sentence boundaries. Practise accurate simple past forms and complete clauses first, then combine them using controlled subordinate clauses.

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