Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph illustrates the average price change of metals such as copper,zinc and nickle in every months during 2014.

Overall, nickle accounted for highest share of metals prices in every month,followed by zinc aslo share second highest share in metal prices. Futhermore,copper also followed a similar trajectory.

In 2014, Nickle held a majority of shares in the month of January is 6% which is always accounted for higest portion in metal prices. Furthermore, there is negligible fluctation is record form Febrauary to March and see a huge declining in the month of june. Moreover zinc also held a highest share around 3% in the month of Feb and record a little ups and down form march to may and seen a highest declined in the month of june vice versa.

Simultaneouly, Copper also held a highest share in the month of Jauuary around 2% and record a lowest share in the month of june and october.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the three metals and include a brief overview, but the main features are not accurately or fully summarised, which limits the response. The claim that nickel had the highest share “in every month” is incorrect: it fell below copper and zinc in several months, and its sharpest fall was in June. You mention some correct points, such as nickel at about 6% in January, zinc reaching about 3% in February, and copper at about 2% in January. However, the response omits the broad pattern of all three metals turning negative around June and recovering towards the end of the year. Also, “copper…lowest…in June and October” overlooks its lower value in May and June. Select the key trends and compare them accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs of detail. This gives the reader some organisation, and connectors such as “Furthermore” and “Moreover” show attempts to link points. However, progression is limited because the details are grouped mainly by metal without a clear account of the year’s stages or direct comparisons. Several transitions are repetitive or do not clarify the relationship between ideas; “vice versa” does not clearly explain the preceding decline. The overview also repeats the idea of metals’ “share” rather than establishing a useful summary of the trends. Organise the body around the early-year rise, mid-year fall, and late-year recovery, using comparisons to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “average price change,” “declining,” “fluctuation,” and “trajectory,” so the topic is generally identifiable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, sometimes making the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “highest share of metals prices” does not describe a monthly percentage change, and “held a majority of shares” suggests ownership rather than a price movement. “Negligible fluctuation is record” and “highest declined” are also unclear. Spelling errors such as “nickle,” “Futhermore,” and “Simultaneouly” further reduce control. Use precise terms such as “monthly price change,” “rose,” “fell,” and “recovered,” and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with linking words, but the range is limited and complex sentences are often faulty. Errors in verb forms and sentence construction appear in examples such as “there is negligible fluctation is record” and “record a little ups and down,” while “Nickle held a majority…in January is 6%” combines incompatible structures. Articles, agreement, and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “accounted for highest share” and the missing spaces after commas. These errors sometimes make relationships between figures and time periods hard to understand. Build clearer sentences with a subject and a correctly formed verb—for example, “Nickel rose by 6% in January, then fell to 4% in February”—and proofread each sentence for agreement and punctuation.

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