Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart given shows the mean monthly change in the rate of three metals during 2014. Compare the data by choosing and presenting the main points *, and make analysis where related.

Overview the starting point in average monthly change in price of copper , nickel and zinc ending point in change in price compared with previous month .

First of all the chart is two line first line is straight line and forward line is second . first line in mention monthly name and , second line in percentage price in mention . The second line in main point to left side in 1 to 7 positive point and 0 to -4 negative point . The copper line* starts on the left side at the point with* two numbers in decreasing* value in February, including: March, April *, May*, Jun*, increasing; July*, August*, September*, October*, November*, less mini decreased* , December increased. The Nickel price starts in left side with six points monthly, starting Jan*, decreased value in February*, March*, April*, May*, June*, increasing value in July*, August*, September*, October *, decreased value, November*, December*. The Zinc starting point is on the left side with one number Monthly, starting Jan*, increased value in February*, decreasing value in March*, April*, May*, June*, increasing value in July*, August*, September*, decreasing value in o

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify all three metals and attempt to describe their monthly movements, including the sharp fall in nickel around June and the later recovery. However, the response only minimally fulfils the task because it does not provide a clear, accurate overview of the main features. The opening overview merely refers to starting and ending points, and the account then becomes an incomplete month-by-month list. Some trends are misreported: copper rises from June to July, rather than continuing a general decrease, while zinc falls from February through June, not just in the sequence described. The response also ends partway through the zinc description and gives no meaningful comparison of the metals’ overall patterns. Select the key highs, lows and shared movements, and summarise them accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response, with an opening, an overview-like statement and separate descriptions of copper, nickel and zinc. This gives the reader some indication of the intended structure. However, information is not arranged coherently enough: the overview does not state a clear main trend, and the body relies on repeated sequences such as “starting Jan, decreased value in February, March, April” without explaining how the figures change. The first-line/second-line explanation interrupts the report rather than helping it progress. The zinc account stops mid-sentence, leaving the final section incomplete. Use clear paragraphs for an overview and grouped comparisons, and connect each point with precise references to the relevant months.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “monthly change,” “percentage price,” “decreasing” and “increasing,” so the reader can recognise that the response concerns price movements. However, the range is limited and several phrases are awkward or unclear, such as “the chart is two line,” “starts on the left side at the point with two numbers,” and “less mini decreased.” Repeating “starting,” “decreased value” and “increasing value” also makes the account sound like a list rather than a concise data report. Choose standard graph language and use it precisely: describe a figure as a percentage change, say that a price rose or fell, and identify a peak, low point or recovery where relevant.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentence patterns, including the copper sequence and the clauses beginning “The Nickel price starts…” and “The Zinc starting point…”. However, sentence structures are very limited overall, and frequent errors make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Examples include “Overview the starting point… ending point,” “the chart is two line,” and “The Zinc starting point is on the left side…,” where sentence construction and verb forms are incomplete or inaccurate. Commas and asterisks also interrupt sentences, and several clauses are left unfinished, particularly the final zinc description. Practise writing complete subject–verb sentences, then combine related information with accurate clauses, for example: “Nickel fell sharply in June before recovering later in the year.”

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