Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the information of three metals features change the price of the previous month during the year of 2014. Average monthly change in prices of metals copper, nickel and zinc every month these metals changes in price than the previous month and we summarize the information of the line graph.
Firstly, copper average monthly changes in price in janurary the copper was started from 2 next month in feburary price of copper decreased the copper metal continously decreased to the month of june than after this month copper slightly increased at the last of the year in december the price of copper reached about 1.5 during the year of 2014. Second the metal of nickle started high price in janurary nickle started from 6 and highly down change the price of previous month at the end of the year change the price of highly decreased and reached 1. The last metal of zinc in first month the price of this metal increased after it, the price continue decreased every month at last, the price reached 2.
In the conclusion, the line graph gives the information of three metal and tells about the price of every month in the conclusion the price of metals decreased every month but zinc slightly increased of the year of 2014 furthermore, other two metals decreased its price every month.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You identify all three metals and include some relevant figures, such as nickel beginning at 6 and ending at 1, and copper reaching about 1.5 in December. However, the account only partially captures the main trends, and the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate. Copper did not decrease continuously until June: it fell to around 0.5 by March, stayed there in April, and was negative in May and June. Zinc also did not simply decline throughout the year; it rose in February, fell to October, then recovered to 2 in December. The conclusion that all metals decreased every month conflicts with the data. Select the main overall pattern—sharp early fluctuations, mid-year falls, and late-year recovery—and support it with accurate comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic structure, moving from an introduction to separate comments on copper, nickel and zinc, followed by a conclusion. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression within the paragraphs is often difficult to follow, and linking language is repetitive or awkward. For example, “after this month” and “at the end of the year” do not clearly connect the stages of the trends, while “In the conclusion” is repeated within the final paragraph. The opening also repeats the task rather than establishing a concise overview. Grouping the metals by shared patterns, and using clear time markers such as “from January to June” and “in the final two months,” would make the comparisons easier to follow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “line graph,” “decreased,” “increased” and “reached,” so the reader can recognise that you are describing price movements. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or repetitive, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to interpret. For instance, “the information of three metals features change the price” and “highly down change the price” are not natural ways to describe the data. “Price” and “change” are repeated frequently, and “nickle” is misspelled. Use precise terms for movement and comparison, such as “fell,” “fluctuated,” “remained stable” and “recovered,” while checking spelling and collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, but these structures are often faulty, and errors frequently make relationships between events unclear. For example, “the copper was started from 2 next month in feburary price of copper decreased” lacks clear sentence boundaries and has incorrect verb construction. In “the price continue decreased every month,” the verb form is also inaccurate. Articles, agreement and punctuation are inconsistent, as in “the price of metals decreased every month but zinc slightly increased of the year.” Most sentences rely on simple clauses joined together, with little accurate control of more varied structures. Build shorter, complete sentences first, then practise accurate past-tense forms and clauses using “while” or “whereas.”
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