Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart illustrates that average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Overall zinc was started from the month of january the percentage was 1%. The value was slightly up in the month of febauary 3% respectively. In the month of june the average was extremely down and the value was neagtive 1%. But it was recover slowly every month in th end of the year the value was 2%. and the other one nickel which totally dead in the month of december.

The nickel was started value was 6% and significantly down in the mid of the year and value was -3% and the month of november slightly increase and value was 1% and remain constant in next month.

The copper was started 2% and slightly down in the mid of the year and value was -1% and the end of the year the value was recover 2%.

Zinc was started 1% in th month febuary the value was increase with 3%. but the in month of june the value was badly decrease -3 but it can recover little bit in every month in the last month of december value was 2%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify all three metals and report several relevant figures, including nickel’s January peak of 6% and June low of about -3%, as well as zinc’s rise to 3% in February. However, the account is only partial and contains important inaccuracies: copper’s lowest change was about -0.5%, not -1%, and it ended at about 1.5%, not 2%. The final paragraph repeats zinc and incorrectly says its June figure was -3%; that value belongs to nickel, while zinc was about -1%. The overview is also unclear and does not summarise the main pattern across the metals. Give one accurate overview, then select and compare the key highs, lows and recoveries.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some paragraphing, and the response attempts to discuss the metals in separate sections. However, the information is not arranged coherently: zinc is described in both the second and final paragraphs, while copper receives only a brief account, and the opening overview does not establish a clear direction for the report. Connections between ideas are often unclear, as in “But it was recover slowly every month in th end of the year,” and “and the other one nickel” does not clearly signal a comparison. Plan the report around an overview followed by logically ordered comparisons, and avoid repeating the same series. Use linking words only where they clarify the relationship between figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “negative,” “recover,” and “constant,” so the reader can recognise that you are describing changes over time. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the intended meaning difficult to follow. For example, “nickel which totally dead” is not an appropriate way to describe a price change, and “badly decrease” does not express a precise trend. Spelling errors such as “febauary,” “neagtive,” and “recover” also reduce accuracy. Build a small set of precise trend expressions and use them consistently, such as “fell,” “reached a low,” and “recovered gradually.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both short statements and longer sentences, but grammatical control is weak and errors frequently affect clarity. Examples include “zinc was started from the month of january,” “the value was recover,” and “the nickel was started value was 6%,” where verb forms and sentence construction are faulty. Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “in th month febuary the value was increase,” while several clauses are joined without clear punctuation. Practise forming accurate past-tense sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example, “Zinc rose to 3% in February” and “Nickel fell to -3% in June.” Then combine ideas using simple, correctly punctuated comparisons.

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