Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The below graph illustrate the average monthly change in the prices of three metals which is copper,nickel and zinc during 2014.

Overall,all the metals have similar pattern rices rose or held in the begining of the moth and fell sharply in the mid of year then became stable at the end of the year.

Nickel started approximately at 6% in the January and fell steeply to roughly 1% in the March then again fell and stayed at -3% at June. Zinc are staying at 1% in the start of the year and then rose 3% in the Febuary amd then fell and stayed at -1% in the June moreover it stable in the end of the year at December and price is stable 2%. Futhermore, Copper is only the meatl which is stable almost all the year in January the price of copper is 1% then it fell harshly in march at 0.5% with time this metal comeout from it down fall and stayed at 1% in the July August and September in addition it fell in the next two month but stable at the end of the year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the three metals and include an overview of their broad movement, then report several relevant figures, such as nickel’s fall from about 6% in January to around -3% in June. However, the overview is not fully accurate: the metals do not all follow the same pattern, and copper does not fall sharply in mid-year. Some details are also misreported or unclear. Copper is about 2% in January, not 1%, and its lowest point is around -0.5% in May and June; zinc reaches about -1% in June, then rises to roughly 2% in December. The response covers the task only partially because important comparisons and the distinct end-of-year recovery are underdeveloped. Give a clearer overview and select accurate key features.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, with an introduction, an overview and details about each metal. This gives the reader a general route through the information. However, progression within the body is uneven: the account moves from nickel to zinc and then copper, but long sentences combine several months and trends, making comparisons difficult to follow. Linking expressions such as “moreover,” “furthermore” and “in addition” are used, but they do not always show a clear relationship between the points. For example, the zinc sentence joins its June low to its December value without explaining the intervening recovery. Use separate, focused sentences and group metals or periods by shared features to make the organisation clearer and cohesion less repetitive.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “fell steeply,” “stayed,” “stable” and “approximately,” so the main trends can usually be understood. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate, sometimes making the description awkward: “similar pattern rices,” “fell harshly,” and “comeout from it down fall” do not express the trends naturally. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “begining,” “moth,” “Febuary” and “Futhermore.” Aim for precise, conventional language for describing data, such as “fluctuated,” “declined,” “recovered” and “remained relatively stable.” Check spelling and use collocations that clearly distinguish a fall, a rise and a period with little change.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the reader can generally identify which metal and months you are discussing. However, the longer structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, tense, articles and sentence boundaries make the account difficult to read. Examples include “The below graph illustrate,” “Zinc are staying,” and “the price of copper is 1% then it fell,” where the verb forms or sentence construction are not controlled. Commas are also missing after introductory phrases, and several ideas are joined into run-on sentences. Practise writing one clear comparison per sentence, checking subject–verb agreement and past-tense forms, and using full stops to separate complete ideas. More accurate control of basic structures would make your information easier to follow.

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