Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph given show the change of frequency of metals value in during 2014

The graph shows the data of an year of 2014 which reports that in 12 months three of the metals copper nickel and zinc was in their hype of maximum average value in their starting months from january or february and te month of the june is the worst and lowest point for the nickel. The copper is might look more stable then other two metals nickel and zinc. zinc was also on peak time in their first two months of the year then it goes down and minimum value in june as others.

There is no more difference in all three of them and one thing is common they all of them was in their east point in june and after june it started rising up and becoming stable and at the end of the year they again jump high and probably go up in new year first months.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response5.0
Coherence and Cohesion5.0
Lexical Resource4.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.0

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the three metals and attempt to describe their overall movement, including nickel’s sharp fall and copper’s relative stability. However, the account only partially reports the graph’s main features, and some claims are inaccurate or too vague. For example, all three metals did not reach their lowest point in June: copper was lowest in May and June, while zinc reached its low in June and remained near that level through October. The statement that there was “no more difference” also overlooks nickel’s much larger fluctuations and copper’s smaller changes. Include a clear overview and support it with accurate comparisons, such as nickel beginning highest and falling most sharply, while all three recovered towards the end of the year.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has some organisation: it begins with an introduction, then describes broad trends, and uses phrases such as “then” and “after June” to show sequence. However, the progression is not consistently clear, and the second and third paragraphs repeat the idea that the metals fell in June and rose afterwards. Some references are difficult to follow, particularly “they all of them was in their east point,” which obscures the intended comparison. Group the information more logically—for example, give an overview first, then compare nickel’s larger swings with the steadier copper and zinc patterns. Use linking expressions to clarify contrasts and time periods rather than repeating the same general point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant terms, including “stable,” “maximum,” “lowest point,” and “rising,” so the reader can recognise that you are describing changes over time. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear, such as “change of frequency of metals value,” “in their hype,” and “east point.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “te month” and “january,” also reduce accuracy. Choose precise language for a line graph: describe prices as rising, falling, fluctuating, or remaining stable, and refer to peaks and troughs. Avoid informal or unclear expressions and check spelling of month names and metal names.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a sentence beginning “There is no more difference…” and one linking events with “after June.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence construction sometimes make the message difficult to understand. Examples include “The graph given show,” “three of the metals … was,” and “it started rising up and becoming stable.” Several sentences also lack clear punctuation or contain awkwardly joined ideas. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, such as “The graph shows…” and “Prices fell in June before recovering.” Then build longer comparisons while checking subject–verb agreement and consistent tense.

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