Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graps demonstrates the average price changing during 2014 of three metal resources.

Overall, three metals are inspected in this graph, considerable decrease in nickel's average price, while copper ended with the highest percentege of price compared to the previous month, whereas Nickel ended with the lowest percentage.

To begin with, Nickel had a dramatical decrease in the percentage of change in price going from 6% in January to 1% in Mars, then the change in price held stable for a month before it started going dow wildly again reaching its lowest point in june (-3%), And for Zinc started by an increase from 1% to 3% in the first month then it went stongly down from February to june reaching -1%, Next one is Copper who had also a constant decrease starting from 2% in january till it touched less than 0% in June.

Secondly, Nickel went up to -1% and stood still for the next three months till septembre where it decreased in a month to -2%, in decembre Nickel's change in price stoped at 1%.While

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the three metals and report several key movements, including nickel’s fall from 6% in January to −3% in June and copper’s decline from 2% to below zero by June. The overview also notes that copper finishes highest and nickel lowest, which matches the chart. However, coverage is partial: the response ends abruptly at “While,” and the later movements of copper and zinc are not fully described. Some details are inaccurate or unclear; for example, nickel reaches −2% in October, not September, and then rises to 1% in November. Develop a complete overview and select the main turning points across the whole year to make the report more fully informative.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the report with an overview followed by “To begin with” and “Secondly,” and the sequence generally follows the months. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several metals’ trends are combined in long sentences, and the second body paragraph shifts between nickel and other series without a clear organising principle. Linking expressions such as “Next one” are awkward, while “While” at the end leaves the final connection unfinished. Use separate, clearly focused paragraphs—for example, one for the first-half changes and another for the later trends—and connect comparisons explicitly. This would give the information a clearer overall progression and make references between sentences easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “decrease,” “increase,” “reaching its lowest point,” and “stood still.” However, the range is limited and several noticeable spelling or word-choice errors make parts less clear: “graps,” “percentege,” “dramatical,” “stongly,” and “stoped.” Some phrases are also unnatural for describing the data, such as “average price changing” and “went up to −1%.” Aim for accurate, conventional expressions such as “monthly price change,” “fell to −1%,” and “remained stable.” More precise verbs and correct spelling would help you describe trends with greater clarity and reduce the effort required of the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “while” and sequences joined by “then.” However, complex sentences are often faulty or difficult to control. For example, “Overall, three metals are inspected in this graph, considerable decrease in nickel's average price” joins clauses without a clear grammatical link, and “And for Zinc started by an increase” lacks a clear subject. There are also problems with articles, sentence boundaries, and punctuation, as in “1%.While.” These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Practise building complete clauses with an explicit subject and verb, and divide long sequences into shorter sentences. Check that each sentence is complete and that punctuation clearly marks its boundaries.

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