Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, Interviewer ask personal questions like hobbies and social status. While some people agreed that this information is useful, other people says that it is irrelevant. I firmly believe that knowing hobbies and status of individuals can not define their real personality. This essay will discuss both view and give my opinion.

To begin with, employer judges interview candidates character by their interests.If person loves traveling, he will more comfortable in field jobs. For example, a person loves football, it needs good qualities of teamwork and leadership. If a person practices daily of it, they develop their skills. Moreover, person also reviewed by their marital status. If person has a good married life, it can be say that person is more responsible and trustworthy. Also , he will never leave their job abruptly. For example, A married person has more responsibilities of their family and they always think about their future. Therefore, married persons are more stable and efficient towards their work.

On the other hand, hobbies will changes gradually day by day. Person everyday learns something and get experience, so their preferences are also changes according to their actions. For example, a person likes playing cricket in childhood, after a certain age he would like to read books instead of playing. Youngsters are often change their jobs until they find better high paying job. Furthermore, a women often judge by their social status. A woman who is married always questioned whether she planning for pregnancy or maternity leaves. Interviewer certainly ignore her skill and qualifications, which is totally unacceptable.

To conclude, people always examine by their hobbies and marital status. Even though hobbies are defined person’s character, it not completely realistic. But questions about marital relationships totally irrelevant. I strongly believe that employers should select employees based on their true skills and experience.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and state a clear opinion: the introduction questions whether personal details reveal a person’s character, and the conclusion argues that hiring should be based on skills and experience. The examples about teamwork in football and possible pregnancy-related bias make the discussion relevant. However, the two sides are not developed equally. The argument that marital status signals responsibility is asserted rather than supported, and the claim that married people are less likely to leave is a broad generalisation. Your point about discrimination against women is more persuasive, but could be linked more explicitly to why such information is irrelevant to assessing job suitability. This covers the task, while fuller explanation and more balanced support would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs presenting the two views, and a conclusion. Transitions such as “To begin with,” “On the other hand,” and “To conclude” help readers follow the discussion, and examples generally appear alongside the points they illustrate. Some connections are less clear or mechanical, however. The shift from hobbies to marital status in the first body paragraph is abrupt, and “Therefore” introduces a conclusion based on a generalisation rather than a fully established argument. References such as “it” and “they” can also leave the reader unsure whether they refer to a person, a hobby, or a group. Use clearer topic sentences and more precise referencing to make progression smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “social status,” “teamwork,” “leadership,” “responsibilities,” and “qualifications.” These choices allow you to discuss both job-related interests and the risks of discrimination. However, the range is limited in places, and several word choices or collocations sound unnatural or imprecise, such as “judges interview candidates character,” “good married life,” and “leave their job abruptly.” Repetition of “person,” “hobbies,” and “status” also reduces flexibility. Aim for more precise expressions for evaluating candidates and describing employment decisions, while checking word forms and collocations. This would make your meaning more natural and exact without changing the relevant ideas.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “If a person loves football…” and a relative clause in “A woman who is married…”. However, control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “Interviewer ask,” “other people says,” “hobbies will changes,” and “it not completely realistic,” which show problems with agreement and verb forms. Articles and sentence construction also need attention, as in “If person has a good married life” and “If a person practices daily of it.” Punctuation and spacing are uneven, particularly around sentence boundaries and commas. Practise checking each sentence for a clear subject, correctly formed verb, and complete grammatical pattern.

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