Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Sometimes the requirment for job application is to give information about personal life like their likes and dislikes,interest ,social and merital life whether they r single or married,so some of the the people believe that it is useful to get information for the job application while others argue that it is not that much significant.

For the employer to hire somebody it is good to know about the personal life of job applicant as it plays a greater role in puntuality .As singles have enough time to do their chores on time as compared to those who have families so the employer will show a bit flexiblity to married compared to singles.Also to provide allounces to the family it is beneficial to be asked earlier in interviews,also there might be some thing relevant to job to which the applicant do not show interest so before hiring they were asked abiut interest .

While the opponant said that it is the responsibilty of job applicant to perform their duties irrespective of their families and there is no role of familes.And despite of likes and dislikes one should perform duty according to employer and should not give the choice of chores of interest.

I believe that there should be proper investigation in interviews so that one should know about the personal life.and their likes and dislikes so that manager mangae people according to their choices and show some flexibilty

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both views and state your opinion, so the response is relevant to the question. The first supporting point is that family circumstances may affect punctuality and flexibility, and you also mention allowances and whether an applicant is interested in the work. However, these ideas are not clearly explained, and the claim that single people have more time is a broad generalisation. The opposing view is only briefly presented: you say employees should perform their duties regardless of family or preferences, but do not develop this with an example or explanation. Your own position—that employers should investigate personal circumstances to manage staff flexibly—is present but needs clearer justification. The response is also 13 words below the required minimum. Develop each view with a specific, relevant example and explain your opinion more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph supporting the usefulness of personal information, a paragraph presenting the opposing view, and a concluding opinion. This helps the reader identify the main stages of your answer. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and several points are joined together in long sentences, particularly the opening and the paragraph beginning “For the employer to hire somebody.” Linking phrases such as “Also” and “While” are used, but the relationships between ideas are not always clear. The conclusion repeats the view about flexibility without summarising the discussion. Use one main idea per sentence, organise each body paragraph around a clear topic sentence, and use referencing and transitions to show how examples support your claims.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to employment and personal circumstances, including “job applicant,” “punctuality,” “flexibility,” and “perform their duties.” This gives you a basic range for discussing the topic. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “show a bit flexibility,” “provide allowances to the family,” and “investigation in interviews.” Spelling errors—including “requirment,” “merital,” “opponant,” and “responsibilty”—are also noticeable and can distract the reader. Aim to learn common employment collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise wording would help distinguish between personal details that are relevant to a role and information that should not affect hiring decisions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “While” and a comparison beginning “As singles have enough time.” However, complex sentences are often faulty or difficult to follow. For example, the opening sentence lacks clear sentence boundaries, and “As singles have enough time to do their chores on time as compared to those who have families” is not a complete, well-controlled comparison. There are also recurring problems with articles, agreement, and sentence construction, as in “there is no role of familes” and “so that one should know.” Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and full stops. Practise building clear subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check each sentence for a complete structure.

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