Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The information the that job owners seek for when screening an applicant is been interviewed such as marriage status, hobbies and the things that mostly catches their attention has over the time been seen by some individuals as not relevant while others see it as an important part of the process.
These informations are very important because it helps the organization to take data of married men working with them and as well the single ladies and guy, their preferences with their areas of specialization with determine possibly where the employer will fix the worker so as to work perfectly, on the aspect of hobbies, information about some ones preffered activities will help the company know the department he/she will fit in. In my own view, i think getting information like marital status, hobbies and things of interest may be vital for the organization to collect data and make some future plan about their workers but i don't think that either married or not has anything to do with the person's job specification and area of specialty, because being a married man does stop you from performing very well in your assign job and i think that employers need these informations just for data and also to know the strength of the.
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AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 213 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, which remain superficial and under-developed. While you attempt to address both sides of the argument and provide a personal opinion, the lack of depth and the failure to meet the length constraint prevent a higher score. The arguments regarding marital status and hobbies are repetitive and lack specific examples or logical expansion. To improve, you must ensure you fully explore each viewpoint with supporting evidence and reach the required word count to allow for a more comprehensive discussion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no introduction or conclusion, and the body paragraphs are not clearly delineated. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often mechanical, such as 'These informations are' and 'on the aspect of'. The progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of the argument. To improve, you should use clear paragraphing to separate your introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, and employ a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'job owners' instead of 'employers' and 'take data' instead of 'collect data'. The phrase 'the things that mostly catches their attention' is imprecise. Additionally, there are grammatical errors involving word forms, such as 'preffered' (spelling) and 'informations' (uncountable noun). To improve, focus on learning collocations related to the workplace and professional contexts, and ensure you use nouns correctly regarding countability.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'The information the that job owners seek for... is been interviewed', which is syntactically confused. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'being a married man does stop you' (should be 'does not stop') and 'information... will help... he/she will fit in'. Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at complex sentences are often faulty. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions.
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