Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

There is an on going debate regarding whether interviewer should ask in candidate about personal details like their hobbies, interest and their marital status. There are devided opinions. A group of individuals react positively towards this trend and say that such data may be relevant and useful; However, other are denied to this trend.

Discussing the former view, supporters believe that candidate's personall life information helps employers to understand skills and abilities of interviewee. Hobbies and interests express person's life style as well as their nature. Moreover, mariteillll status significantly afferts people proffesionall and working life that's why many business and companis are ask for such information. For instunce

Candidates who have interest in leadership, problemsolving and dedication are prioritize by employers. Person who pursue this hobbies are considered as more passionate and enthusiastic through meritcl status information.

interviewer measures abilities and dedication of applicant. a married person have more responsibility them single one so job role as unmarried applicants.

consequently personal information of interviewee in regards of their interest, hobbies and meritstatus is play important role to understand candidates abilities and dedication.

On the other hand many individuals have opposite view towards this trend because of security purpose. Some applicant do not want to reveal their pesonall life details due to risk of misused. some people want to keep their personal and proffesional life separate; moreover, some person have fear of others judgements in regards of their pesonall life. for example, private information like marital status or personell interests are slight of sensitive

topics in so many people avoid to discuss it. people think that candidates have selicted on basis thir abilities talenet and qualification rather than thir hobbies, interest or marital status. personal informetion is not that importent as proffetionel quelities of person. so it is irrelevanet to ask pesonel details in ricruitment process.

To conclude, Although some individuls argue that personal informetion asked during recruitment process such as interst, hobbies and marital stertus is irrelevanet and risky, such information helps employers to understand candidate's dedlication, skills, abilities and enthusiasm. If ask only relavenet information rither them too person with maintaining security is more effective.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both views and providing a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While the first body paragraph attempts to link hobbies to professional skills, the reasoning is somewhat disjointed and lacks clarity, particularly in the section regarding marital status. The second body paragraph provides relevant arguments regarding privacy and security, but the overall position could be more clearly articulated throughout the essay. Some ideas are repetitive, and the connection between personal information and professional competence remains under-developed in places.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'On the other hand', and 'To conclude'. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or inaccurate, such as the abrupt transition 'For instunce' which is left hanging. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences is sometimes interrupted by grammatical errors. While the overall progression is coherent, the lack of smooth transitions between some ideas prevents the essay from reaching a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are frequent spelling errors that occasionally impede readability, such as 'devided', 'mariteillll', 'proffesionall', 'companis', and 'ricruitment'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on basic terms. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'recruitment process' and 'professional qualities', the high frequency of spelling mistakes and the misuse of words like 'denied to this trend' (instead of 'opposed') indicate a need for more precise word choice and better proofreading.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('many business and companis are ask'), article usage ('a married person have'), and sentence fragments or run-on sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and incorrect capitalization. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high density of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction limits the score. More attention to verb forms and sentence boundaries is required.

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