Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Owners sometimes prefer to collect information about individuals in terms of their strengths and enthusiasm, whether or not you are married. Some find this information worth it, but others not. I partially agree with this statement. I will discuss this assertion in the upcoming paragraph, including my own opinion and an example.

In the former statement, people say that documenting likes or dislikes, passions, or their marital status is not important because their preferences change over time and their favourite activities do not always stay the same. These unstable and inconsistent facts can not prove anyone's capability or potential. This could lead to false judgment of people.

In the letter statement, the masses believe that information about interviewers, like areas of interest and pastimes, helps to understand the youngster's passion for a profession and career preferences. That could work better for both employees and employers because it makes it easy for managers to divide responsibilities and work areas. For example, in daycares, Registered Early Childhood Educators sometimes like to work as a cook or float instead of working in the children's room.

In my opinion, information that employers like to collect while interviewing the new people in order to get knowledge about they abilities, preferences or fascinations if much better to do so.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you address both sides of the argument and provide a personal opinion, the discussion is underdeveloped. The points made regarding marital status and hobbies are brief and lack sufficient explanation or depth. To improve, you must expand on your arguments with more detailed reasoning and concrete examples. The conclusion is also very abrupt and does not effectively summarize the main points or reinforce your position. The failure to reach the minimum length prevents a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as the transition 'In the letter statement' (which should likely be 'latter'). The progression of ideas is clear, but the lack of development makes the overall flow feel disjointed. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the connection between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to create a more natural, sophisticated flow between your arguments.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You use some basic terms like 'worth it' and 'youngster's passion', which are slightly informal or imprecise in this context. There are also some word choice errors, such as 'Owners' instead of 'Employers' and 'interviewers' when you likely meant 'interviewees'. To improve, focus on using more academic collocations and precise terminology related to the workplace and human resources to demonstrate a more flexible command of the language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'information... if much better to do so' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage throughout the text. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from being considered accurate. To achieve a higher score, focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed correctly.

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