Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Recent trends show that some organisations request for personal details from applicants to know about their marital status and preferences. While some people have argued that such information are not necessary, others are in support of it. I am of the opinion that personal details should be divulged in the resume to make the HR's work a little easier.This essay will discuss both views before I will state my opinion.

Nowadays, corporate organisations are cautious when it comes to who they let into their premises as staff. Thus, it is important to know the applicants preferences such as their likes and dislikes as it will help them know the personality of who they are hiring. For instance, if they are looking for someone who pay attention to details, organised and has excellent communication skills, they don't need to arrange for an interview first before knowing if you qualify. The resume has already told them what they want to see. So, this method saves the HR a lot of time to rule out the wrong candidates for the role.

On the other hand, disclosing personal information such as, whether a person is married or not, is indicting. For instance, someone who meets all the requirements for a Personal Assistant role in a firm may be disqualified simply because she's married. As most organisations tend to seek for young, vibrant and single ladies. This is because, there is a widespread perception that married women may not have all the time needed for the role. It is also rumored that even when they are considered for the job, their husbands may feel insecurd especially if she's working with a male boss which may cause a rift in their home.

In my opinion, disclosing personal information is necessary because it's a way of knowing a person who you intend to hire even without meeting them. It tells you a little more about their lifestyle and see if it matches with the standard of the company.

In conclusion, inasmuch as applicant's personal details are on the resume, it shouldn't be used as a means to disqualify them. Applicants should be treated on equal playing ground and they should be judged based on their experience and qualification.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both views on whether employers should ask for personal details like hobbies and marital status, and it provides a clear personal opinion throughout. In the introduction, the writer states, 'I am of the opinion that personal details should be divulged in the resume to make the HR's work a little easier.' Ideas are generally well-extended, such as the discussion on how preferences indicate personality and the counter-argument regarding marital status and discrimination. However, there is some minor contradiction or lack of refinement in the conclusion, where the writer states that personal details shouldn't be used to disqualify candidates, which slightly clashes with the earlier defense of using them to rule out candidates. Overall, the task response reaches a solid Band 6.5 to 7.0 level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is clearly structured with an introduction, body paragraphs addressing each viewpoint and the writer's opinion, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate ideas. Cohesive devices are employed reasonably well, using transitional phrases such as 'While some people have argued', 'Nowadays', 'Thus', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion'. However, referencing and progression occasionally feel slightly mechanical, and there are minor structural redundancies (e.g., 'before I will state my opinion' in the intro, and then restating the opinion in a separate body paragraph before the conclusion). Progression of ideas is clear overall, justifying a Band 6.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate and generally appropriate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms like 'corporate organisations', 'marital status', 'preferences', 'disqualified', and 'perception'. There are, however, some lexical and collocational inaccuracies, such as 'request for' instead of 'request', 'such information are' (grammatical/agreement error affecting word form), 'indicting' instead of 'detrimental' or 'discriminatory', and 'insecurd' (spelling error for 'insecure'). Despite these occasional errors, communication is not impeded, and the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the intended meaning, matching Band 6.0 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and conditional structures (e.g., 'if they are looking for someone who pay attention to details...'). However, grammatical accuracy is inconsistent. There are several noticeable errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('such information are', 'someone who pay attention'), punctuation/spacing issues (missing space after the period in the first paragraph), and word form errors ('pseudoscience' style issues like 'insecurd'). Complex sentences frequently contain errors, placing this performance firmly in the Band 6 category where errors persist but rarely impede overall communication.

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