Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Employers sometimes ask people job applicants to provide personal information, such as their hobbies, interestsand marital status. While some people believe that this kind of details help employers assess whether candidate is suitable for a position, other argue that they are irrelevant and should remain private. In my opinion, asking about certain personal interests may be useful in assesing candidate's suitability, but information about marital status is generally unnecessary.

On the other hand, asking about hobbies and personal interest can help employer to assess candidate's suitability such as understanding of an applicant's personality and skills. For example, someone who is regularly participate in team sports may demonstrates qualities such as, teamwork, openness, communication and time management. Similarly, a person who is participate more in social activites may indicate that a candidate is socially aware and value social aspects. Therefore, it is important while selecting righ candidate for righ place and get to know about personal interests and hobbies consedering through resumes and interviews.

On the other side, many people believe that personal information should not influence any recruitment related decisions, particulary when it has no direct connection with job performance. Asking about marital status could lead to concious or unconcious discrimination. whether a person is married, single, or has a child does not determine their ability to perform their duties effectively. As a result, candidates could be judged on their personal information rather than their qualifications and ability.

In my opinion, employer should primary focus on candidate's professional skills, relevant expirence and skills. Personal details such as marital status ashould generally excluded from interview questions.

In conclusion, hobbies and interest are helpful to know about individual's ability, skills and personality treats but marital status is very irrelated to employement suitability. Recruitment decisions should be fair and based on true analysis which needs to be done.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response successfully addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both views on personal information in job applications and providing a clear personal opinion. The writer argues that hobbies and interests can be useful indicators of skills and personality, whereas inquiries regarding marital status are unnecessary and potentially discriminatory. Ideas are adequately extended and supported with relevant explanations, such as how team sports demonstrate teamwork. However, the development of ideas tends to be slightly repetitive in places, particularly in the conclusion and body paragraphs, and some generalizations are a bit simplistic. Overall, the task is well-addressed, fulfilling the requirements for a Band 6.5 or 7.0, and fits best at Band 6.5 due to occasional under-development.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response features a clear overall progression and is logically organised into an introduction, alternating body paragraphs representing each view, an opinion paragraph, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate distinct points. Cohesive devices are generally present and functional, such as 'On the other hand,' 'Similarly,' and 'As a result.' However, there are some minor mechanical errors and occasional awkward referencing, such as starting paragraphs with 'On the other hand' and then 'On the other side,' which feels slightly repetitive and less flexible. Progression overall remains clear, but cohesion occasionally feels formulaic. This aligns comfortably with a Band 6.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common items such as 'marital status,' 'suitability,' 'discrimination,' and 'professional skills.' However, there are several noticeable word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors throughout the text, such as 'candidate's suitability' lacking an article in places, 'concious or unconcious' (conscious or unconscious), 'righ candidate for righ place' (right candidate for the right place), 'consedering' (considering), 'particulary' (particularly), 'primary focus' (primarily focus), 'expirence' (experience), 'ashould generally excluded' (should generally be excluded), and 'very irrelated' (largely irrelevant or unrelated). These errors occasionally impede smooth reading, placing the lexical resource at a Band 6.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional and relative clauses (e.g., 'While some people believe that...', 'someone who is regularly participate...'). However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement and verb forms (e.g., 'this kind of details help', 'candidate is suitable', 'who is regularly participate', 'who is participate', 'employer should primary focus', 'treats' instead of 'traits'). Punctuation and article usage also show persistent flaws. While these errors rarely completely obscure meaning, their high frequency prevents the writing from achieving a Band 6.5. Therefore, a Band 6.0 accurately reflects the grammatical control demonstrated here.

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