Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Sometimes employers ask their employees for the personal information such as hobbies, interests and marital status. Some people think that this information is relevant and useful for the versatility of employees, while others think that it is irrelevant to professional competence. I firmly support the former viewpoint as apart from the academic sheets, hobbies reveal deeper insight of a person's personality.

The most significant reason behind considering applicant's personal interests, and relations help the employers to gain the broader understanding of their personalities. Let us take sports as a hobby for instance which tells about the leadership, and team management qualities of a person. Howover, this interest helps in the establishment of better relationships among the team members. Moreover, interests like painting and drawing are helpful in some jobs like architect, fashion designing and web designing. These jobs demands the sketching skills of a person in addition to professional qualifications. In addition to, asking about the marital status of a person help the employers to know about the responsibilities of the employees in their personal lives. For example, some jobs are tour based so, employers have to prioritised these jobs to unmarried people rather than married ones, because married people sometimes don't manage to go out due to their kids responsibilities.

Apart from this, some people believes that recruitment processes should be entirely based on employees professional experiences and qualifications. Asking personal information is completely irrelevant among the hiring process, and it doesn't determine the capabilities of a person for doing the job effectively. Furthermore, enquiring about the marital status sometimes becomes a discrimational act towards employees. Due to this, married people can feel themselves depressed and demotivated.

In conclusion, I beleive that personal interests and marital status tells about the leadership qualities and stability of an employee respectively. So, other than educational qualifications and professional experiences, employees should enquire about the personal qualities for better work output.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both views and state a clear position in the introduction and conclusion: you support considering personal information because it can reveal qualities beyond qualifications. The examples about sports and creative interests are relevant, and you also explain the opposing concern that marital-status questions may be discriminatory. This meets the task well, but the discussion is not equally developed. The link between hobbies and teamwork is explained more clearly than the claim that marital status shows an employee’s “stability”; that conclusion is asserted rather than supported. The example of prioritising unmarried applicants also risks endorsing unfair treatment without acknowledging how employers could use such information appropriately. Develop these points and qualify broad claims to make the argument more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph supporting the usefulness of personal information, a paragraph presenting the opposing view, and a conclusion. Ideas generally progress logically, and signposts such as “Moreover,” “Apart from this,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the discussion. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “Howover, this interest helps in the establishment of better relationships” does not clearly show how sports leads to better team relationships, and “In addition to” is used awkwardly to introduce another point. The conclusion also introduces “stability” without establishing that idea in the body. Use more precise referencing and connect each example explicitly to the claim it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “professional competence,” “team management,” “qualifications,” and “discriminational act.” This allows you to discuss both recruitment and personal qualities, but several word choices, collocations, and spelling errors make the expression less natural and sometimes less precise. Examples include “academic sheets” for academic qualifications, “relations” for relationships, “tour based” for jobs involving travel, and “prioritised these jobs to unmarried people.” There are also spelling or word-form problems such as “Howover,” “beleive,” and “discriminational.” These do not prevent the main message from being understood, but they limit precision. Focus on accurate, natural collocations and check spelling and word forms during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “while,” “because,” and “which,” and the overall meaning is usually clear. However, errors in agreement, articles, and sentence construction recur. For example, “interests and marital status tells” should use a plural verb, while “these jobs demands” should use a plural subject with a plural verb. In “asking about the marital status of a person help,” the gerund phrase requires a singular verb. Some sentences also have awkward or incomplete grammatical patterns, such as “In addition to, asking…” and “which tells about the leadership.” Review subject–verb agreement and the grammatical patterns following linking phrases. More consistently accurate complex sentences would strengthen control.

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