Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays there are various type of job in surrounding such as hybrid jobs, IT jobs, in that this types of question necessary for your break time, relex time and game zone to distruct the mood. Others are disagree with this statement because some jobs don't have such things they think this is waste of time and employes can mannage by their own. In my opinion this distruction like relex time, break time and to play game is important employs get bored when they do one thing atlist 9 hour so this is good. This essay will examine both view and give appropriate example.

In one hand, In hybrid company or in IT company interviewer definately ask personal question cause they can give a better environment to employers nowadays the work load is increase by twice and thatwise companys can give this type of breaks for example my brother neel patel who is doing a job in hyperlink company and that company give flaxible hours and break time game zone time to relex body and it's important

In the other hand, , many people believe that employers should focus on professional qualifications rather than personal circumstances. Questions about whether an applicant is married or single have little connection with their ability to perform a particular job. In fact, such questions may lead to unfair discrimination, as employers might make assumptions about a person's availability, family responsibilities or commitment to work. For instance, a married applicant might be wrongly considered less flexible than a single candidate. This could prevent qualified individuals from receiving equal employment opportunities. Therefore, recruitment decisions should be based on relevant skills, experience and performance.

In conclusion, although information about hobbies and interests can help employers understand applicants' personalities and interpersonal skills, I believe that asking about marital status is unnecessary and potentially discriminatory. Employers should prioritise professional competence and ensure that all candidates are treated fairly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response presents both views and gives a clear final position: hobbies may help employers understand applicants, while marital-status questions are unnecessary and potentially discriminatory. The discussion of discrimination is relevant and supported with the example of a married applicant being wrongly judged less flexible. However, the first view is not explained accurately or fully: the opening focuses on breaks, relaxation and game zones, rather than explaining why employers might ask applicants about hobbies or interests. The example about your brother describes workplace benefits, not questions asked during recruitment. This leaves an important part of the task under-developed and makes the position less clear in the opening. Explain the relevance of interests to job fit or teamwork, then distinguish this from private marital information.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a recognisable essay structure, with an introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs and a conclusion. The second body paragraph progresses logically from the irrelevance of marital status to the risk of discrimination, and the conclusion restates the main position. However, the opening paragraph is difficult to follow because it combines several ideas about job types, breaks and personal questions without clear links. The first body paragraph is also incomplete, ending after the example without explaining how it supports the view. Linking phrases such as “In one hand” and “In the other hand” are used mechanically and inaccurately. Use clearer topic sentences, develop each paragraph around one aspect of the question, and connect examples explicitly to the point they illustrate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant vocabulary, including “professional qualifications,” “discrimination,” “family responsibilities,” and “employment opportunities,” which helps express the second viewpoint precisely. However, the range is uneven, and repeated or inaccurate wording makes the first part harder to understand. For example, “distruction” appears to mean distraction, while “relex time” and “game zone time” do not clearly explain why employers ask about applicants’ interests. There are also spelling errors such as “definately,” “employes,” and “mannage,” alongside awkward phrases such as “various type of job in surrounding.” Aim for accurate, task-specific terms and check spelling. Using vocabulary such as “recruitment,” “teamwork,” and “suitability for the role” would make the discussion clearer and more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The essay attempts both simple and more complex sentence forms. The later paragraph includes a clear conditional example—“A married applicant might be wrongly considered less flexible”—and the conclusion uses a contrast clause effectively. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, especially in the opening and first body paragraph. Examples include “there are various type of job,” “this types of question necessary,” and “the work load is increase,” where agreement, sentence structure and verb forms are faulty. Some sentences lack a complete or clearly connected clause, as in “In one hand, In hybrid company or in IT company interviewer definately ask personal question cause…” Punctuation is also inconsistent, including the repeated comma after “In the other hand.” Practise accurate sentence patterns and review articles, plurals, agreement and verb forms.

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