Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter

• say where you think you left the papers
• explain why they are so important
• tell the manager what you want him/her to do

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

I AM EXPRESSING THIS EMAIL TO YOU TO INFORM DURING MY STAY IN YOUR HOTEL I FORGOT MY IMPORTANT PAPERWORK IN THE SUITE WHERE I STAYED IN.

I WOULD REALLY APPRECIATE IF YOU CAN HELP TO FIND MY DOCUMENTS. DURING MY CHECKOUT FROM THE HOTEL I KEPT MY PAPERS IN THE CLOSET WHERE ,THERE WAS A LOCKER IN THE CUPBOARD WITH THE PASSCODE. AS LONG AS I KNOW THE PASSCODE FOR THE LOCKER IS 0907,TRY THIS PASSCODE AND LET ME KNOW IF IT WORKS. THIS DOCUMENTS ARE REALLY IMPORTANT AS I AM BUILDING A HOUSE NEAR THIS HOTEL AND IT INCLUDES THE DESIGN,BUGDET AND CONTRACT WITH THE COMPANY WHO IS BULDING IT. I KNOW YOU HAVE BUSY MORNING IN THE HOTEL BUT TAKE FEW MINUTES FROM YOUR WORK TO HELP ME OUT.

ONCE YOU FIND PAPERS ,WHAT I DO LIKE YOU TO DO IS SEND A MAIL TO ME ON THE ADDRESS 45 WEST GARDEN,NEW JESRSEY,08830,USA .I WILL PAY THE COST OF SENDING MY DOCUMENTS THROUGH A CHEQUE ONCE ITS DELIVER TO MY ADDRESS GIVEN ABOVE.

I HOPE THIS EMAIL FINDS YOU .LOOKING FORWARD TO GET MY PAPERS BACK .REALLY APPRECAITE YOUR TIME.

THANK YOU.

SAM PATEL.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three points clearly: you identify the suite and the cupboard locker as the likely location, explain that the papers contain house designs, a budget and a building contract, and ask the manager to locate and mail them. The passcode and offer to cover postage make the request practical and specific. These details extend the main ideas and keep the purpose clear throughout. To strengthen the response further, make the location account more precise: the wording about keeping the papers “in the closet where” there was a locker is difficult to follow, and it is unclear whether the papers are inside the locker or merely in the cupboard. A more consistently appropriate, polite tone would also improve the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a recognisable progression: you report the loss, describe where the papers may be, explain their importance, and then give instructions for returning them. Paragraphing helps separate these functions, and phrases such as “Once you find papers” signal the next step. This gives the response a coherent overall arrangement. However, some connections and references are awkward or unclear, particularly “the closet where, there was a locker in the cupboard,” and “this documents,” which makes the reader pause to work out the relationship between the items. The all-capital presentation and abrupt closing also reduce readability. Use clear paragraph breaks, normal capitalisation, and straightforward linking phrases to make the progression smoother and less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “paperwork,” “passcode,” “design,” “contract,” and “sending,” so the reader can understand the purpose and practical details. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “building a house” and “cost of sending my documents.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “expressing this email,” “busy morning,” and “send a mail” do not sound idiomatic in this context. Spelling errors such as “bugdet,” “bulding,” “Jesrsey,” and “apprecaite” are noticeable and can distract the reader. Aim for accurate, natural phrases and check spelling carefully, especially in names and key details.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more extended sentence forms, for example the explanation beginning “This documents are really important as…” and the conditional request “Once you find papers…”. However, complex attempts are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to process. Examples include “I forgot my important paperwork,” where the past perfect would fit the sequence better, “This documents,” which has incorrect agreement, and “I would really appreciate if you can help,” which needs a more accurate clause structure. Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “take few minutes” and the run-on wording around the locker. Practise accurate sentence patterns, agreement, articles and punctuation before adding more complexity.

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