Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter

• say where you think you left the papers
• explain why they are so important
• tell the manager what you want him/her to do

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir/ Madam

I am writting this letter to informing you as I left my office doucment in your hotel bedroom or at reception i do not reember properly.

However it is my important to me as it is a part of my presentation without it I will face problem as it contain all the details of my company if it will be seen by our opposition company they might use it and gain the profit. Although my boss will fired me from company if the document will stolen.It will make me unemployed

I am asking a favour to you as could you please check it whether the paper is there or not and if it there could you please porter it to my place i will pay you whatever the cost it is.

Waiting for yoy repsond to me . Kindly respond me as soon as possible.

Yours Faithfully

Charmy Patel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt: identifying the location of the papers, explaining their importance, and requesting action from the manager. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. The explanation regarding the importance of the documents is repetitive, focusing heavily on the fear of being fired rather than the nature of the documents themselves. While the task is fulfilled, the tone is occasionally informal and the expression of ideas lacks the precision expected for a formal business letter. To improve, ensure that each point is expanded with more professional detail and clear, logical reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter is organized into a basic structure, but the flow between sentences is often disjointed. You use some cohesive devices like 'However' and 'Although,' but they are sometimes used incorrectly or lead to awkward sentence structures. Paragraphing is absent, which makes the text appear as a single block of information. To improve, you should separate your ideas into distinct paragraphs: one for the purpose of the letter, one for the explanation of the documents, and one for the request. Using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'consequently,' 'furthermore') would help guide the reader more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is generally limited and contains several errors that occasionally impede clarity, such as 'porter it' instead of 'courier' or 'send,' and 'opposition company' instead of 'competitor.' There are also spelling errors like 'writting,' 'doucment,' and 'reember.' While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of precision and the frequent spelling mistakes prevent a higher score. You should focus on learning common business collocations and proofreading your work to correct basic spelling errors, which will significantly improve the professional quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter, including issues with verb tenses ('my boss will fired me'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence construction ('I am asking a favour to you as could you please'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences often result in errors that affect the flow of the text. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence patterns and ensuring that your verb forms are consistent. Pay close attention to the use of articles and prepositions, as these are currently causing frequent minor errors.

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