Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter

• say where you think you left the papers
• explain why they are so important
• tell the manager what you want him/her to do

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Manager,

I am writing regarding the document which i accidently left on table of room in which i had my stay.

Secondly, those papers important for me because those are the papers of registration of land. which i have to submit to the Gaoverment office by end of the day or i have will have to repeat the whole procedure once again and it took me 3 months. also, i have to pay heavy fine of 5000 cad and they take it very serious offence and i am not willing to do all this process at this time.

I would appriate if you check the room and handover the document to the front desk of the hotel and i can collect it or will send my known one to collect it.it would be really a great big help for me.

looking forward to hear from you.

best regards

paresh patil.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task: identifying the location of the papers, explaining their importance, and requesting action from the manager. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the explanation regarding the land registration papers is a bit repetitive and could be more concisely expressed to improve clarity. While the task requirements are met, the response lacks the level of detail and professional polish expected for a higher band score. Ensure that your explanation of the 'why' is logically structured to avoid confusion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive feature. However, the logical flow between sentences is occasionally disjointed. You rely on basic transitions like 'Secondly' and 'also', which makes the progression feel somewhat mechanical. The use of cohesive devices is limited, and some sentences are run-on, such as the second paragraph, which contains several distinct ideas joined by 'and' or 'or' without proper punctuation. Improving the use of linking words and varying your sentence structure would significantly enhance the readability and coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks range and precision. There are several spelling errors, such as 'accidently' (accidentally), 'Gaoverment' (government), and 'appriate' (appreciate). Additionally, the phrasing is sometimes unnatural, such as 'my known one' to refer to a representative or friend. To improve, you should focus on using more precise terminology related to business or formal correspondence. While your meaning is generally clear, the frequent spelling and word-choice errors indicate that you need to proofread your work more carefully to ensure accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. Issues include missing articles ('on table of room'), incorrect verb tenses ('it took me 3 months' should be 'it has taken me'), and punctuation errors, such as missing capital letters at the start of sentences and improper use of commas. The sentence 'i have will have to repeat' is also grammatically incorrect. To reach a higher band, you need to demonstrate better control over basic grammar, particularly subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles.

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