Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter

• say where you think you left the papers
• explain why they are so important
• tell the manager what you want him/her to do

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I writing this letter to request you check my paper, which I was accidentally forget in your hotel room.

In the terms of detail, my name is Gursimran Singh . I stayed in your hotel last Saturday on 23rd and 24th of August. I was in room 203 . when I arrived in my home , I discovered that I had left one of my black leather backpack in your hotel room. In that backpack i have my papers which is very important for me .

The backpack was black in colour and leather materials it was Tommy Hilfiger brand's backpack . In that backpack there are too many papers some of my degree's and brith certificate which is very important for me . Next week I have an interview in USA embassy for visitor visa that's why I need that documents urgently.

Kindly , confirm from the housekeeping department as well as found and loss department if they collect anything from room number 203 . If you will successful to find my bag then I request to you please send it by the help of parcel . I will pay the of service fee .

I look forward for your response

your sincerely

Gursimran singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: identifying the location of the papers, explaining their importance, and requesting specific action from the manager. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive, particularly regarding the description of the backpack and the contents. While the task is fulfilled, the explanation of why the papers are important could be more concisely integrated to improve flow. Overall, the response meets the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the narrative. There is a clear progression from the introduction to the problem, the explanation, and the final request. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally repetitive (e.g., the frequent use of 'In that backpack'). Some transitions between sentences feel abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the shift between discussing the 'papers' and the 'backpack'. Improved use of linking words would enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to convey the necessary information clearly. There are some attempts at more specific vocabulary, such as 'housekeeping department' and 'urgently'. However, there are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'found and loss department' (should be 'lost and found') and 'send it by the help of parcel'. Additionally, there are minor spelling errors like 'brith' instead of 'birth'. The range is sufficient for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'I writing this letter' (missing auxiliary verb), 'which I was accidentally forget' (incorrect passive/tense usage), and 'if you will successful to find' (incorrect adjective/verb structure). Subject-verb agreement and article usage are also inconsistent. These errors are frequent, though they do not prevent the reader from understanding the message. A greater focus on basic sentence construction and verb tenses is needed.

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