Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter
- say where you think you left the papers
- explain why they are so important
- tell the manager what you want him/her to do
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Mohit sir,
I am wroting a letter i forgot my important documnet in recepation area, where i was doing my work on computer.There was lots of cutomers arrived for booking rooms, and i was so tired due to that i forgot my documnets in your hotel.
These file is very important for me because lots of documents in it including passport, completion letter of master degree, student permit and several other documents in to it. Actually i brought this file for applying work permit near our hotal immigartion called overseas immigration.Because of busy day i was unable to go the office and forgot my file on the main desk and retured at home without carrying my documents.
I am requesting you please take my file from the desk and i will take from you as soon as possible. I am so worry about that.
your faithfully,
Veerpal Kaur.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The candidate has addressed all parts of the prompt, successfully explaining where the papers were left, why they are important, and what action the manager should take. However, the response falls short of the word count requirement by one word, with a total of 149 words instead of the minimum 150. While the ideas are relevant, some parts like the explanation of the files are slightly repetitive and under-developed. Because the word count threshold was missed, a small penalty is reflected in the task achievement score, placing this criterion at Band 5.5. The appropriate bullet points from the prompt are covered, but further expansion would be needed for a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter lacks a standard greeting, as it starts with 'Dear Mohit sir' instead of the requested 'Dear Sir or Madam'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas feels somewhat unstructured. For instance, the second paragraph is quite long and crams multiple ideas together without smooth transitions. Cohesive devices are basic and sometimes repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'and' and 'because'. Referencing is generally clear, but the overall progression of the letter feels a bit disjointed due to run-on sentences and punctuation issues. Overall, the arrangement meets the criteria for Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is fairly basic and repetitive, with several spelling errors such as 'wroting', 'documnet', 'recepation', 'cutomers', 'hotal', 'immigartion', 'retured', and 'worry'. There are also awkward collocations, such as 'near our hotal immigartion called overseas immigration'. While the vocabulary is adequate to communicate the basic meaning of the situation, the noticeable errors and limited range restrict the score to a Band 5.0. To improve, the student needs to expand their range of functional workplace vocabulary and pay closer attention to spelling and word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, but grammatical accuracy is weak throughout the response. There are numerous errors in tense, article usage, and sentence structure, such as 'I am wroting a letter i forgot', 'These file is very important', and 'i will take from you'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences and run-on clauses without proper conjunctions or full stops. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and demonstrate limited control over complex grammatical structures, placing this criterion at a Band 5.0.
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