Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter
- say where you think you left the papers
- explain why they are so important
- tell the manager what you want him/her to do
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear james ,
Hope you are doing well . my name is jordon . on 12 march i stayed at your hotel in room number 121 . i would like to say i forgot my some cruical paper in the room .
firstly, it is my job promtion letter . therefore ,next week i will go to new company for interview so i need to bring it . on those day it was seat on table but i am busy with my called however i foegot it .
if it possible can you please courier at my home . my home adress is 233 harbour street london 2121. I am happy to pay for courier charges. My phone number is [redacted phone].
I am looking forward to get back to you.
If you have any question regarding this matter please email me. My email id is rthehdhh@hjeej. com
your sincerely,
jordon
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The letter addresses all three required points: it identifies the hotel room as the likely location, explains that the papers are a job promotion letter needed for an upcoming interview, and asks for them to be couriered, offering to pay. These details make the purpose clear and relevant. However, some points are less fully developed: “on those day it was seat on table” does not clearly explain when or how the papers were left, and the importance of the document could be explained more precisely. The request is understandable, but a more courteous, complete explanation of the preferred delivery arrangements would strengthen the letter.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The information is arranged in a generally coherent order: the writer identifies themself and the stay, explains the papers’ importance, then makes a request and provides contact details. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages. Some linking is mechanical, particularly “firstly” and “therefore,” and the connection between the interview and the need for the letter is not expressed smoothly. The sentence beginning “on those day” is also difficult to follow, which weakens progression within the explanation. Use clearer transitions and group related details—for example, put the location and circumstances of leaving the papers together, followed by the reason they are needed and the requested action.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses enough vocabulary to communicate the main purpose, including “courier,” “interview,” and “courier charges.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause: “cruical,” “promtion,” “foegot,” and “adress” obscure otherwise relevant details. Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “forgot my some” and “get back to you.” Aim for accurate, conventional expressions in a formal letter, such as “left some important documents in my room” and “I look forward to hearing from you.” More precise vocabulary for the papers and their significance would improve clarity and control.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The letter includes both simple statements and attempts at longer sentences, such as the explanation linking the interview to the need for the document. The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors affect clarity. Examples include “i stayed” and “i need,” where capitalisation is needed, “i forgot my some cruical paper,” which has an incorrect word order and singular/plural form, and “if it possible can you please courier,” which needs a complete conditional structure and clearer punctuation. The closing “I am looking forward to get back to you” also uses the wrong verb pattern. Practise accurate sentence boundaries, articles, verb forms, and polite request structures while retaining some complex sentences.
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