Band 7.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter
- say where you think you left the papers
- explain why they are so important
- tell the manager what you want him/her to do
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir or Madam,
Student answer (Band 7.5)
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing this letter in regard to the event, which our company hosted at your hotel on 23rd February. Overall, event was successful, and appreciated by the majority of business partners who attended. However, I lost important business related documents during the event. Specifically, I remember that documents were with me until the dinner. Therefore, it must have fallen somewhere near the buffet counters.
That file has a crucial information related to our company, and it also has a written notes, which I had taken during the event from different stakeholder's presentation. Additionally, It consists the confidential accounting papers, client records, feedback forms from the guests. Therefore, it is really urgent for me to retrieve that file.
I would really appreciate it if you could take a look at cctv camera recordings, and possibly check with the catering staff if someone had seen that file.
I am looking forward to your prompt response regarding this matter.
Yours faithfully,
Jay
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 8.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 7.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 8.0
The letter covers all three required points clearly. You identify the likely location as “somewhere near the buffet counters,” explain the papers’ importance through the company information, meeting notes, accounting papers and client records, and make a specific request to review CCTV and ask catering staff. These details make the purpose clear and the ideas well developed. The formal opening and closing also suit the situation. To make the response even more complete, clarify whether the papers were in a folder or file and give a way for the manager to contact you or return them. These are minor practical details; the central task is addressed effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.5
The information is arranged in a clear progression: you introduce the event and loss, describe the likely location, explain the documents’ significance, and then state what action you want. Paragraphing supports this sequence, and linking expressions such as “However,” “Therefore,” and “Additionally” help connect the ideas. The final request and closing are appropriately placed. Some transitions are a little mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “Therefore,” and the first paragraph combines event evaluation with the loss before moving to the location. For a more polished flow, use a wider range of natural links and make the shift from the meeting to the missing file more direct.
Lexical Resource: Band 7.0
You use a suitable range of formal and topic-specific vocabulary, including “business partners,” “stakeholder’s presentation,” “confidential accounting papers,” and “client records.” These choices communicate the business context precisely, and the tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a hotel manager. Some collocations and word forms are less natural: “a crucial information” would be “crucial information,” “consists the confidential accounting papers” would be “contains confidential accounting papers,” and “business related documents” is better written as “business-related documents.” “CCTV camera recordings” is understandable but can be expressed more concisely as “CCTV footage.” Greater consistency in natural collocations would make the vocabulary more precise and fluent.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5
The response includes a mix of simple and more complex structures, such as “I would really appreciate it if you could…” and the relative clause “which I had taken during the event.” Most sentences are easy to understand, and the request is framed politely. Some grammatical errors remain, including missing articles in “Overall, event was successful” and “a crucial information,” and the agreement error in “it must have fallen,” where the subject is plural “documents.” There is also a sentence-structure problem in “Additionally, It consists the confidential accounting papers…” These errors do not prevent understanding, but they limit accuracy. Check articles, singular/plural agreement, and verb patterns, and use a lowercase “it” after the comma.
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