Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to request about a paper which I left in your hotel yesterday. I visited your hotel with my friends . We were sitting in a family area. I was putting my bags and paper at the corner of table. When I clicked some pictures with my friends then I forgot to take my papers. When I arrived at home then I found papers that was missing .

These papers are very important for me. It includes all details regarding my study permit and payslips. I have to submit it for immigration purposes. If I will not submit it then I can not do work .

I kindly request you to find these papers . I would appreciate it if you could return it to me. I will write my address and phone number with this letter. I look forward to hearing from you. Thank you for your consideration.

Yours Faithfully,

Arshdeep Kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response7.0
Coherence and Cohesion7.0
Lexical Resource5.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.5
Overall6.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three required points: you identify the likely location (“at the corner of table”), explain the papers’ importance for your study permit and immigration submission, and ask the manager to find and return them. The purpose is clear and the tone is appropriately polite, especially in “I kindly request” and “I would appreciate it if you could return it to me.” The explanation of importance is relevant, though the consequence of not submitting the papers (“I can not do work”) could be made more precise, and the request would be more effective if you specified how the manager should contact or send them. Overall, the task is covered clearly, with some details that could be developed further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The information follows a clear, sensible sequence: you explain the visit and where the papers may have been left, then describe their importance, and finally make your request. Paragraphing separates these main stages effectively, and phrases such as “These papers are very important for me” help signal the shift in focus. The timeline is also understandable, moving from the hotel visit to discovering the papers were missing at home. To make the progression smoother, reduce repeated sentence openings with “I” and connect some related events more naturally. For example, the account of sitting in the family area, placing the papers on the table, and leaving them could be combined into a more fluid sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the situation and includes relevant terms such as “study permit,” “payslips,” and “immigration purposes.” The polite expressions “I kindly request” and “I would appreciate it” suit a formal letter. However, several word choices and collocations are noticeably awkward, including “request about a paper,” “family area,” and “return it to me,” where the reference is to multiple papers. “Clicked some pictures” is also less natural in this context. These choices do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, but they limit precision and naturalness. Aim to use standard phrases for reporting lost property and refer consistently to the documents as a plural set.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The letter communicates its main ideas, but grammatical control is uneven, particularly in longer sentences. For example, “When I arrived at home then I found papers that was missing” has an awkward time-clause construction and a subject–verb agreement error; “It includes all details” also does not agree with the plural “papers.” Conditional forms need attention in “If I will not submit it then I can not do work,” and the past-tense sequence in the account of the visit is not consistently controlled. Most sentences are simple, with limited variety in clause structures. Practise accurate past-time narration, plural agreement, and standard conditional patterns, then use a wider range of sentence forms while checking punctuation and spacing.

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