Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter

• say where you think you left the papers
• explain why they are so important
• tell the manager what you want him/her to do

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear sir /Madam,

This letter is the manager of the hotel .The manager left his meeting papers . I think you put the meeting paper of a new hotel project . I was going to share a idea a off expense, structure , estimate , place information , maps and project helpers contacts . this file is more important how i will manage the things .How i will define the things my project parteners . The meeting attenders are waiting for me i put my file in the office draw now there is no file . I find here and there but just waste of time . i was worried about when i tell the manager about the file i lost it .How he will react , may he shouting on me becuse that file was really importan . i tell him the mananger about the file is missing , he was upset becuse he has meeting and all the inform in that file just he was quite nothing he says his color is fully red .

Your faithfuly ,

Aniqa

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You attempt to cover the three requested points: you identify the papers as a project file, explain that it contains estimates, maps and contacts, and indicate that you want the hotel to help. However, the location is unclear and contradictory: you mention an “office draw” but do not clearly say where in the hotel you left the file. The importance is partly explained through its contents, but the account then shifts to your partners’ and manager’s reactions rather than developing a clear request. The letter also does not explicitly ask the manager to search for the file, contact you if it is found, or arrange its return. Make each point direct and specific, especially the action you want the manager to take.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response contains relevant details, but they are not arranged in a clear progression. The opening, “This letter is the manager of the hotel,” does not establish the purpose, and the writing moves abruptly from the project contents to searching at home and then to imagined reactions. There are few effective links between these ideas, while repeated forms such as “how I will” and “because” do not clarify their relationship. The reader must work to infer what happened and what you are asking for. Organise the letter into a brief opening, a paragraph identifying where the papers were left and why they matter, and a closing paragraph with a clear request and contact details.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You include some task-relevant vocabulary, such as “estimate,” “maps,” “contacts,” and “project,” which helps convey the general subject of the papers. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the message difficult to interpret. For example, “office draw” is unclear, “meeting attenders” is not a natural expression, and “project parteners” contains a spelling error. Phrases such as “share a idea a off expense” also obscure what information the file contains. Use precise, conventional expressions for a hotel letter: for example, “desk drawer,” “meeting participants,” and “project partners.” A wider range of accurate words for locating, identifying and retrieving the file would make the message clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to communicate several connected ideas, but sentence structures are limited and frequent errors make relationships between ideas hard to follow. For instance, “This letter is the manager of the hotel” does not form a clear sentence, and “I think you put the meeting paper” uses an unclear subject and verb. There are also problems with articles, agreement and sentence boundaries, as in “a idea” and the long sequence beginning “I was going to share.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, with spaces before full stops and several ideas joined without clear boundaries. Practise writing short, complete sentences first, then combine related points using accurate clauses and punctuation.

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