Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter

• say where you think you left the papers
• explain why they are so important
• tell the manager what you want him/her to do

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Dear ma'am and Sir,

Good day! I just want you to know that i have a important letter to give it to you, This letter is very important because inside of this invelope attacthed the title of the land that i bought to you last month . i just want you to verify the title if it is no hidden problem . Because there is some people are claiming on it and they said its mine, so thats why i just want you to clear on it . Because this is not a small problem ,this is a big problem and i dont want to loose my money. its really hard to find a money now . so please do it in now .because i have no time to another day to do it. this dy only is my time to do this , thank you and god bless you.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The letter gives a reason the papers matter: they relate to a land title and a dispute over ownership, and it asks the recipient to verify the title urgently. However, it does not properly address the hotel situation. You say, “I have a important letter to give it to you,” rather than explaining that you left papers behind, and you never identify where in the hotel you think they were left. The request is also directed toward checking the title, not locating or returning the papers, so the manager’s role is unclear. To strengthen the response, state where you left the documents, explain their importance briefly, and make a specific request for the hotel to search for and contact you about them.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The ideas are connected in a basic sequence: you introduce the letter, explain the ownership dispute, and end with a request and thanks. This gives the reader some sense of your purpose. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, and repeated links such as “Because” and “so that’s why” make the progression feel repetitive rather than clearly organised. The shift from explaining the land-title problem to asking the recipient to act “now” is not fully clarified. Use separate paragraphs for the situation, the importance of the papers, and your request, and use clear references such as “these documents” so the reader can follow what you mean.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the situation, including “title,” “hidden problem,” “claiming,” and “money,” which helps convey the dispute and its importance. There are also attempts to express urgency and seriousness. However, several choices or spellings make the message less natural or precise, such as “invelope,” “attacthed,” “loose my money,” and “a money.” Phrases like “clear on it” and “do it in now” are difficult to interpret in this context. Choose vocabulary that describes the hotel task directly, such as “documents,” “ownership dispute,” “locate,” and “return.” More accurate spelling and natural collocations would make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response communicates several connected ideas and attempts longer sentences using “because” and “so,” showing some effort to go beyond short simple statements. However, sentence structures are often faulty, and punctuation does not reliably separate complete ideas. For example, “I have a important letter to give it to you” has problems with the article and sentence construction, while “inside of this … the title” lacks a clear grammatical structure. Capitalisation is also inconsistent, as in “i,” and several clauses run together with commas or full stops placed awkwardly. Practise writing clear, complete sentences first, then combine them with accurate conjunctions. Check articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries during revision.

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