Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

IN THE GROWING WORLD, TODAY FOLKS THINK THAT MUCH OF THERE TIME IN THE PRIMARY,SECONDARY SCHOOLS AND INDLUDING COLLEGES LIFE ,IS SPEND ON GETTING EDUCATION ON FACTS RATHERTHEN HANDS ON PRATICE .I COMPLETELY AGREE WITH THE STATEMENT MENTIONED ABOVE.

TO START WITH ,IN GARDE 3 TO 7 , STUDENTS NEEDS TO GET HANDS ON PRATICE ON FEW SUBJECTS RATHER THAN FACT . TO EXPALIN THIS ,I WOULD GIVE A EXPAMPLE, NEWTON'S LAW EXPLAINED THAT IF YOU THROW A OBJECT IN AIR ,WITH THE GRAVITY IT WILL COME DOWN THATS A FACT BUT IF YOU SHOW THE STUDENT WITH THE EXPERIMENT THEY WOULD CLEAR PICTURE OF IT. IN PHYSICS, THERE ARE MANY IMPORTANT LAWS WHICH SCIENTIST HAVE DONE WITH MANY EXPERIMENT MANY TRIALS BUT IN THE END THEY DISCOVER THERE KNOWN FINDINGS WHICH FOLKS USE ID NOWADAYS. TO ADD TO THIS POINT , WHEN STARTING THE LECTURE IN THE PRIMARY SCHOOL , TEACHERS SHOULD EXPLAIN THE PROCEDURE BEFORE IMPLEMENTING IT . FOR INSTANCE, WHEN I WAS IN SCHOOL MY TEACHER TOLD ME THE SHRKS ARE OLDER THEN TREES , WHAT SHE DID IS ,SHE GOT A VIDEO COMPARING DSHARKS AND TREES TOGETHER WHERE IT WAS CLEAR TO STUDENTS THAT TREES ARE OLDER THEN SHARKS.

TO EXPLAIN THIS FURTHER , I TOTALLY DISAGREE WITH THIS POINT , I BELIEVE PRATICAL SKILL IS MORE IMPORTANT IN THIS WORLD THEN FACTS , AS FOLKS CANT SURVIVE IN THIS TECHNICAL WORLD WITH FACT .ONE SHOULD HANDS ON PRATICAL KNOWLWGDE TO GET A LIFE. FOR EXAMPLE ,IN AN INTERVIEW NOONEWILL GET A JOB ON THE BASIS OF FACT , RATHER THEY WILL GET JOB IF THEY WOULD HAVE SOME PRATICAL AND EXPERIENCE IN THE WORK WHICH EVER THEY ARE INTERESTED.

TO CONCLUDE, I COMPLETELY AGREE THIS STATEMENT AS I BELEIVE PRATICAL KNOWLEGDE IS MORE APPRECIATED THEN FACT ON THIS GLOBE IN RECENT DAYS.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear in the introduction and conclusion: you support giving practical learning more emphasis than factual learning. You also provide relevant examples, including demonstrating gravity and using a video to explain the age of sharks and trees. However, the response does not fully develop the comparison implied by the question. The interview example supports the value of practical experience, but the essay gives little explanation of why factual learning currently takes too much time or how education should balance the two. There is also a contradiction: you say “I completely agree” at the start, but later write “I totally disagree with this point,” apparently referring to the claim in the prompt. State your position consistently and explain each example’s relevance more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposting such as “To start with,” “For instance” and “To conclude” helps identify the stages of your argument. However, progression within and between paragraphs is not always clear. The first body paragraph moves from Newton’s law to scientific discoveries and then to the shark-and-tree video, without clearly linking these examples to one central point. The second paragraph begins “To explain this further” but introduces a new claim about employment rather than developing the previous example. Repeated transitions also make the organisation feel mechanical, and the conflicting “agree” and “disagree” statements disrupt the overall line of argument. Group related examples and use clearer links between claims and evidence.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to education and employment, including “hands on practice,” “experiment,” “gravity,” “practical knowledge” and “interview.” This gives the reader a basic understanding of your ideas. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “facts,” “practical” and “folks.” Frequent spelling errors, such as “EXPAMPLE,” “PRATICE” and “KNOWLEGDE,” and inaccurate or awkward expressions such as “get a life” and “education on facts” can make the message harder to follow. Aim for more precise academic collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, “practical experience” is more natural than “hands on practical knowledge” in the employment example.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, for example the sentence beginning “I would give a example” and the explanation of the Newton’s law demonstration. This shows an effort to connect ideas, but the range is limited and complex sentences are often difficult to control. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in “students needs,” “is spend” and “scientist have done.” Articles and sentence boundaries are also problematic, as in “if you throw a object in air,” while missing punctuation and inconsistent capitalisation make several sentences harder to read. Practise building shorter, accurate sentences first, then combine them with correctly formed clauses. Pay particular attention to subject–verb agreement, articles and punctuation.

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