Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Lot of people point of view, that in all categorise in education, from primary school to universities is more time to spent on learning fact and low change to have practical skills.

Many of us focusing in education, because our goverment push all student to have enough knowledge for the better future. Moreover our school have more time and focus in academic. Because of that, the student have no choice and the only they can do is to follow the instrution of the school. I really disagree that all universities and schools have a more time and focusing only to develop thier learning fact.

For me, our school need to focus also in the skill or talent not only in the learning fact, because many of successful people today is have a advange skill and talent. Thats skill usually from thier experience and from thier hardworking hobit. For example my neigbor my neigbor is not able to finish his school because of the poverty and having a financial problem that time. However because of his skill, talent and hardworking he is able to hire in the big company thats have huge income and thats happen to him he is become professional welder in united kingdom

To summary focusing in the learning fact is not enough to be successful because not all student is good in academic sometimes skill and talent is the key in the better future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your position is present: you disagree that education should focus only on facts, and you argue that practical skills and talent also matter. The example of your neighbour becoming a professional welder gives the response a relevant personal illustration. However, the task is only partly addressed because the discussion of how much time schools spend on facts is limited, and the reasons are not developed in enough detail. The opening describes the issue but does not clearly state your view; that becomes clearer in the second paragraph. The conclusion repeats the main point rather than drawing the argument together. The response is also 13 words below the required minimum, so there is less space to explain and support your ideas. Develop the example and explain how practical learning could be included at different education levels.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Basic linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Because of that,” and “However” help show relationships between ideas, and the neighbour example is placed in a relevant paragraph. However, progression is uneven: the second paragraph discusses government and school focus, then shifts to your disagreement without fully connecting the points. The third paragraph contains a long example that is difficult to follow, and “my neighbor my neighbor” is repeated. The conclusion is very brief and does not summarise the reasoning. Use clearer topic sentences, avoid repeated linking or wording, and divide the example into shorter steps so the reader can follow its relevance.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “academic,” “practical skills,” “talent,” “hardworking,” and “professional welder.” These choices make your main subject understandable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make parts difficult to interpret, such as “all categorise in education,” “low change,” and “hire in the big company.” Spelling errors, including “goverment,” “instrution,” and “neigbor,” also reduce clarity. Try to use precise phrases for the education system and employment, and check spelling carefully. Replacing repeated general terms such as “skill” and “learning fact” with more specific vocabulary would help you express your ideas more clearly and flexibly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas using longer sentences and clauses, for example, “However because of his skill, talent and hardworking he is able to hire in the big company…” This shows an effort to go beyond short, simple statements. However, the range remains limited, and frequent errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles and plurals can make meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “our school have,” “the student have no choice,” and “he is become professional welder.” Some sentences also lack clear grammatical structure, particularly the opening. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “because,” “although” or “which.” Check subject–verb agreement and verb forms, and use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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